Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir,

I am living your apartment room no 10 in the 2nd floor. Now I am writing this letter to infrom you that I have become some problem.

The problem is that sometime I can not car parking space. Actually, I am a manager in 'The New R P Hardware company. That is why , I can not early in the evening hour at home. So, I can not my car park in your apartment.

Last week, my car hold at the street nearby. And next morning my car has been stolen.Then complain in police station, then I back my car.

To sum with, i would request you that please solve my problem. If

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the central problem—often finding no parking space after returning from work—and explain that your late arrival is connected to your job. The account of your car being left on a nearby street and then stolen also shows why the situation matters. However, the letter only partly fulfils the task: the effect on you is not clearly explained, and the requested solution is not actually stated. The ending, “please solve my problem. If”, is unfinished, so the landlord receives no practical suggestion. The response is also 35 words below the required minimum, which leaves important details undeveloped. Explain the inconvenience and propose a specific measure, such as assigning spaces or introducing permits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: you introduce yourself, describe the parking difficulty, give an example of its consequences, and make a request. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points. However, progression is difficult to follow in places because links between events are unclear. For example, “Last week, my car hold at the street nearby. And next morning my car has been stolen.Then complain in police station, then I back my car” does not clearly show how the car was recovered. The final “If” also leaves the letter abruptly incomplete. Use complete paragraphs and connect events with clear time and cause-and-effect links. A fuller closing paragraph would help the reader understand exactly what action you want.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “parking space,” “manager,” “street nearby,” and “stolen,” so the main topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or combinations make the message difficult to understand, such as “I can not car parking space,” “my car hold at the street,” and “I back my car.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “infrom” and “sometime.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases that describe the problem and its impact, such as “there is no available space,” “I had to park on the street,” and “the car was recovered.” This would make your meaning clearer and more appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “That is why, I can not early in the evening hour at home.” However, sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes obscuring the intended meaning. Examples include “I am living your apartment room no 10,” “I can not my car park,” and “Then complain in police station, then I back my car.” These need clearer subjects, verbs, and tense forms. The account of last week would be more accurate as: “Last week, I had to leave my car on a nearby street. The next morning, it had been stolen, but I reported it to the police and later recovered it.” Practise complete sentences and consistent past-tense narration.

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