Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear mr.sharma,

I am writing this letter to you facing congestion in parking and not empty space is available.

I am farvinder singh living in your buildings apartment. whenever, i came back from duty to home i can not find a space to park my car. All parking spaces are booked by cars.

Unfortunately, it make me Uncomfortable and tired whenever i faced this situation. i also worked for a full day my body not able to do anything but i have to park my car. I am asked from security many time but they said they don't have any solution to this matter. I parked my outside the building without safety.

Could you make some changes to this matter. Moreover, you can arrange new parking system to park more cars.

I hope you will highly pay attention to this matter and find an effective solution.

yours faithfully,

farvinder singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three required points: you describe the lack of available spaces, explain that it leaves you uncomfortable and tired after work, and ask the landlord to improve the parking system. The request is clear, and the letter is appropriately directed to the landlord. The explanation of the impact is relevant, though it could be developed more precisely—for example, explain how parking outside creates a practical or safety concern. Your proposed solution, “arrange new parking system to park more cars,” is relevant but vague; specify a workable measure, such as assigning spaces to residents or checking whether non-residents are using the lot. This covers the task well overall, while some ideas need fuller support and detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a sensible overall order: it introduces the problem, describes its effect, and then makes a request. This makes the purpose easy to identify. Paragraphing also separates the main stages of the message. However, some links between ideas are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “Unfortunately” introduces the effect, while “Moreover” adds a suggestion without a clear relationship to the previous request. The sentence about asking security and parking outside would connect more smoothly if you explained that security could not help, so you had to leave the car outside. Use clearer paragraph breaks and linking phrases that show cause and result, such as “As a result” or “Since no solution was offered.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the central issue, including “parking spaces,” “security,” “without safety,” and “effective solution.” However, the range is limited, and several word choices or combinations sound unnatural, which sometimes makes the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “facing congestion in parking” and “not empty space is available” do not express the situation naturally; “there is a shortage of parking spaces” would be clearer. “Booked by cars” is also an imprecise way to say that all spaces are occupied. Build a more accurate set of phrases for describing parking problems and their consequences, while avoiding repeated use of general words such as “matter” and “solution.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your message is understandable, and you attempt to combine ideas, for example in “whenever I came back from duty to home I can not find a space.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur often enough to affect clarity. In “it make me Uncomfortable,” the verb should agree with “it,” and the adjective should not be capitalised. “I also worked for a full day my body not able to do anything” joins clauses without the necessary punctuation or grammatical connection. Keep the main ideas in complete sentences, check past and present tense consistency, and practise accurate forms such as “I return home,” “it makes me,” and “I have to park.”

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