Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention on a very serious note, which I am observing now a days. Initially when I rented this apartment, the area was not very crowdy but now the situation is different. Actually whenever I came back from my workplace its difficult to find space to park my car in parking lot.

Moreover, Its a stressful situation for me after a very long working hours to find a place for my car and roam around in sear for parking. Furthermore, I have only an hour for rest and have to join back my volunteer work in the evening. So its bothering me a lot and I decided to bring in to your notice.

In conclusion i can suggest an advice if its useful, otherwise you look into this matter. I have seen that few of the big parking areas are booked only by bycycles, so we can use side place under the shed behind the building for cycle parkings so that we can have more convenient parking for cars. It will not only benefit me but also rest of the rentals as well. I would appreciate if you look into this matter urgently.

Your Sincerely,

Umaima Kamran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you describe the growing difficulty of finding a space, explain that it is stressful after work and affects your evening commitments, and propose moving bicycles to a sheltered side area. The purpose of writing to the landlord is clear, and the suggestion is relevant. Some details, however, are less fully developed: for example, you do not explain how often the lot is full or clarify whether the bicycle spaces are currently reserved, so the proposed change is not entirely specific. The closing request for urgent attention reinforces your concern. To make the letter more complete, briefly describe the pattern of the parking problem and explain how the suggested arrangement could be implemented fairly for residents.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: the situation is introduced, its personal impact is explained, and a solution is proposed before the closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” make the relationships between ideas apparent. At times, however, the connectors feel mechanical or do not suit the function of the sentence. “In conclusion” is rather formal for introducing a practical suggestion in a letter, while “So” repeats the cause-and-effect link already established. Some references, such as “this matter,” are also broad. For smoother progression, use fewer signposts and connect the problem, its effect, and the proposed change more directly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main issue and its impact, including “stressful situation,” “parking lot,” and “convenient parking.” There are also attempts at more formal language, such as “draw your attention” and “I would appreciate,” which suit a landlord letter. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “draw your attention on,” “crowdy,” “roam around in sear,” and “bring in to your notice.” Spelling and word forms such as “bycycles” and “parkings” also reduce precision. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they make the letter less fluent. Focus on standard collocations and accurate forms when describing the parking problem and requesting action.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and longer sentences, including a complex explanation beginning “whenever I came back from my workplace.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make the phrasing difficult to follow. For example, “whenever I came back … its difficult” shifts tense and needs a clearer clause structure; “after a very long working hours” has an article and number problem; and “I would appreciate if you look into this matter” needs a more accurate conditional construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “Its” and “In conclusion i.” To improve, check tense consistency, articles and plural forms, and practise forming polite requests with “I would appreciate it if you could…”

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