Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr.Oneil,

I hope you're doing well. I am writing to express my frustration with parking space in my apartment that I'm unable to find whenever I come home from work.

It's been three weeks I'm coming home after midnight and I've to spend another half an hour to find any parking space to park my vehicle. What I noticed that there are a group of young boys who park their motorbikes in our building irresponsibly. As a result, the residents of our building have to park their cars alongside road, which is not safe at all.

Everyday spending hours to find parking spot while coming home is extremely frustrated. I would be grateful if you could look at this matter at your earliest convenience. As parking on roadside is illegal, residents might get charged with heavy penalities.

I would also suggest if you could hire a security guard that might prevents strangers to enter in our building.

Thank you very much for your time and understanding.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Kind regards,

Rashim

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe difficulty finding parking, explain the inconvenience and safety concern, and propose hiring a security guard. The details about arriving after midnight and spending extra time searching make the situation clear, while the risk of roadside parking gives a relevant reason for concern. The proposed solution is understandable, but it is not fully connected to the specific problem: explain how the guard would identify unauthorised vehicles or enforce parking rules. The claim that motorbikes belong to “a group of young boys” could also be clarified, since it is not clear whether they are residents or visitors. Developing these points more fully would make the request more persuasive and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall progression: you introduce the parking problem, describe its effects, make a request, and close politely. Paragraphing helps separate the situation from your concerns and proposed action. Linking phrases such as “As a result” and “I would also suggest” make the relationships between ideas easy to follow. However, the connection between the motorbikes and the lack of spaces is not fully explained, and the security-guard suggestion arrives without showing precisely how it would address the parking issue. The repeated references to difficulty finding a space also make parts of the letter feel slightly repetitive. Clarifying the cause-and-effect sequence and linking the proposed solution directly to it would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for a formal complaint, and phrases such as “express my frustration,” “at your earliest convenience,” and “residents” suit the purpose. You also communicate the safety and financial concerns clearly. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however, including “parking space in my apartment,” “extremely frustrated” to describe the experience, and “heavy penalities.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Aim for more accurate combinations such as “parking spaces in the building’s lot,” “extremely frustrating,” and “substantial fines.” Checking spelling and choosing words that fit the intended meaning will help make the letter sound more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “a security guard that might prevents strangers” and a result clause introduced by “As a result.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “It's been three weeks I'm coming home” needs a clearer tense construction, and “I've to spend” is not the standard form for this meaning. There is also an agreement error in “that might prevents,” where the modal should be followed by the base verb. The sentence beginning “Everyday spending hours” lacks a clear grammatical subject. Review tense patterns, modal verbs, and sentence completeness; greater control of these forms would make your varied structures more accurate.

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