Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear landlord,

Hope you are doing well. My name is Hargunveer Singh, i live in one of your apartments but the root behind to write this letter to you is that in our parking space , i cannot get any single parking space for my car neither at day time nor at evening hence i have to park my car at street after 9pm in city but the main concern is that i am doing night shifts so i need the parking in day time. I feel very frustrated of this scenario since everytime i have to park at pay parking so please provide me the one parking space for car so i can save my money and avoid the stress . Moreover i recommend you to provide any space , i do not need any special treatments and i wish that you could provide the parking within 10days.

Thanks

Hargun

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that spaces are unavailable, describe the effect of your night shifts, and ask the landlord to provide a space. The detail that you need parking during the day gives the complaint a clear personal reason, and requesting a solution within ten days makes the letter actionable. This meets the task well, with some elements more fully explained than others. In particular, the situation could be clearer: “neither at day time nor at evening” is difficult to interpret, and it is not clear whether other residents or non-residents are taking the spaces. Explain how often this happens and what arrangement you are requesting, such as an allocated space or a review of parking use.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: it introduces the problem, explains its impact, and then makes a request. Connectors such as “hence,” “since,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between ideas. However, most of the content is packed into one long paragraph, so the progression is harder to follow than it needs to be. The opening sentence also combines several points, and “Moreover” introduces a second request that largely repeats the first. Use separate paragraphs for the situation and its effects, then the proposed solution, and divide long sentences so each one carries a clear main idea. This would make the organisation more consistent and reduce the mechanical feel of the linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main issue, including “parking space,” “night shifts,” “pay parking,” and “stress.” The reader can understand that the lack of parking costs you money and creates frustration. However, several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the root behind to write this letter,” “at day time,” and “special treatments.” These choices make parts of the complaint less clear and show limited control of collocation. Aim for conventional letter-writing expressions and precise parking terms—for example, explain that you are writing because you cannot find an available space, and ask for an allocated space. More accurate phrasing would make your request sound clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and connectors, as in the sentence explaining that you work night shifts and need parking during the day. However, the response relies heavily on long, joined sentences, and several are difficult to control. For example, “Hope you are doing well” omits the subject, while “i live in one of your apartments but the root behind to write this letter to you is that…” contains problems with sentence construction and punctuation. Capitalisation of “I” is also inconsistent, and the final request is joined to the preceding idea without clear sentence boundaries. Use a mix of shorter sentences and carefully formed complex sentences, checking subjects, verb forms, articles, and punctuation before submitting.

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