Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

i am wriitng to express my dissatisfaction about parking space in apartment. Although i live in apartment since last five years, but i faced difficult to park my car when i return from work because of less space in parking area because my neighourhoods comes early from work so they parked their cars in empty space therefore, i faced peoblem to park my car because my work runs till late night so i come late at apartment that is why i had not vacant space for parking so i always worried about my car due to more robbery in this area. Moreover, i want some space for parking car, you please contact with other people who live in appartment and solve my issue by provide some space so i can secure about my worries.

I hope you would consider my problems effectively and find a solution to tackle with issue and i would appericiate for your further response.

Yours faithfully,

Gagan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe arriving late to find no space, explain that this causes worry about theft, and ask the landlord to coordinate with residents and provide a parking solution. The purpose is clear and the concerns are relevant. The explanation of the situation is the most developed part, while the proposed solution—“provide some space”—is vague and does not explain how the limited parking could be managed. The concern about robbery is also mentioned but could be linked more clearly to the lack of a secure place for your car. The letter already shows the main elements of a complete response; to strengthen it further, make the request more specific, such as assigning spaces or setting parking rules, and develop the reasons briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a recognisable order: it introduces the complaint, explains the difficulty and its effect, then makes a request and closes politely. This gives the reader the overall message. However, most of the explanation is packed into one long sentence, with repeated links such as “because” and “so,” which makes the sequence of causes difficult to follow. The shift to “Moreover” does not introduce a clearly separate point, and the request would be easier to identify in its own paragraph. Use shorter sentences and organise the letter into distinct paragraphs for the situation, its impact, and the proposed action. This would create clearer progression and make the connections between ideas less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the complaint, including “dissatisfaction,” “vacant space,” “robbery,” and “solution,” so the reader can understand the topic and your concern. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are unnatural, such as “faced difficult to park,” “my neighbours comes early,” and “secure about my worries.” Spelling errors, including “wriitng,” “neighourhoods,” “peoblem,” and “appericiate,” are also noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the message. Aim for precise, natural phrases rather than repeating “space” and “problem”; for example, describe the lot as “full” and say that you are “concerned about leaving your car on the street.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences and use some time references, but the complex sentence structure is often faulty, making the explanation harder to read. For example, “Although i live in apartment since last five years, but i faced difficult” combines an incorrect although construction with an unsuitable tense and missing articles. In “my neighourhoods comes early … so they parked,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the tense shifts without a clear reason. The letter also has run-on sentences and inconsistent capitalisation of “I.” Practise separating ideas into shorter sentences, and check articles, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation. More accurate control of these basic patterns will make your meaning clearer while allowing you to retain some complex structures.

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