Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear maria,

Hope this letter finds you in splended health.It is been long time we have not caught up.I am writing you this letter to inform you that i am seeking for new job opportunity.

As you know that currently working in as school trainer. The first reason to leave job it is quit far from my home which creates travell problems for me. Secondly, i want to explore new opportunities that can help me to expand my knowledge and allow me to gain practical experience.

Moreover, i looking for job which provide me a chance to meet with different people. So, i can get thier ideas and gain thier views about different acpects of life. Futhermore, i am also looking for hybrid job so that i can easily manage my personal and professional life.

it would be great pleasure if you provide my ideas for applying new jobs as sites and position which would be appropriate for my present and future. Suggest the ideas regarding creating attractive resume.

Hope you will be able to help me.

Warm regards,

Sukh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that your current school-trainer job is far from home and that you want to develop your experience, describe a preference for meeting different people and working in a hybrid role, and ask Maria for help with job sites, suitable positions, and your résumé. This covers the task well. The reasons for leaving are relevant, but the benefits of the new role and the type of position you seek could be explained more fully; for example, specify what kind of work would let you meet people or what field you hope to enter. Your request is clear, though it would be more direct and natural if you explicitly asked Maria to recommend openings or introduce you to employers.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from an opening, to reasons for leaving, to job preferences and a request for help. Paragraphing supports this progression, and connectors such as “Secondly,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help signal the stages. However, some linking is mechanical, and a few connections are unclear: “Moreover” introduces another preference, while “So” begins a fragment rather than a complete explanation. The request paragraph also combines several ideas in one sentence, making the message harder to follow. Use fewer formulaic transitions and connect each point in complete, clearly ordered sentences. The greeting and closing suit a friendly letter, but capitalisation and punctuation should be consistent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to employment and career development, including “practical experience,” “hybrid job,” “personal and professional life,” and “attractive resume.” These choices communicate your main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, as in “splended,” “travell,” “thier,” and “acpects.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “seeking for new job opportunity” and “provide my ideas for applying new jobs.” Choose standard collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, say “looking for a new job” and “give me advice on applying for jobs.” This would make your meaning smoother and more assured.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including a reason clause in “which creates travel problems for me” and a purpose clause about gaining experience. The overall message remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation occur across the letter. For example, “It is been long time” needs a correct present-perfect form and an article, while “currently working in as school trainer” is missing a subject and contains an unnecessary preposition. “I looking for job” also needs a finite verb and an article. In addition, “So, I can get…” is not a complete sentence in this context. Practise building accurate complete sentences before adding clauses, and check capital letters and spacing after full stops.

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