Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Ram,

I hope your days are going well. I have been working for a large engineering firm for few years and decided to quite at the end of the this month because of the conflict going around our company policy and government rules.

As you know I have deep interest on health and safety so I Prefer working either engineering firm or construction which are more focus on occupational and safety aspect of the employee.

I have been trying almost for 2 months I haven't received any positive response from organization which are to my previous job experience.

If this continue for next few months I might struggle to pay the rent and function my day to day life.

Our interest and field of employment is same so can you ask your manager if there any vacancy coming up later in the summer.

please let me know

Friend

Keshav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining why you are leaving your job, describing your ideal role, and asking your friend for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation regarding company policy and government rules is vague, and the description of the desired job could be more detailed to help your friend understand exactly what you are looking for. To improve, try to expand on your reasons and provide more specific details about your professional interests to make the request more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the current situation to the desired outcome and finally the request for help. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited, and some transitions feel abrupt. For example, the jump from discussing your job search to the potential financial struggle is a bit sudden. Paragraphing is present but could be more distinct to separate the different ideas more clearly. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') would help the ideas flow more naturally and improve the overall structure of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors. For example, you used 'quite' instead of 'quit', and 'more focus on' should be 'more focused on'. Additionally, phrases like 'function my day to day life' are not natural collocations. While your meaning is generally clear, the vocabulary is somewhat basic and lacks the precision required for a higher band. Focusing on learning common collocations related to employment and professional environments will help you express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

Your writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'for few years', 'in engineering firm'), incorrect verb forms ('If this continue'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the text. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and proofreading for small slips like 'quite' versus 'quit'.

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