Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Simanpreet Singh,

I am writing a letter to request you to help me in looking for new job opportunities.

Currently , I worked in lululemon distribution center as a health and safety technician in health and Safety for 8 months and now my contract is finished and my role is changed to material handler.

In those 8 months, I realized that health and safety would be a great option to look for future goals and I now get more involve in occupational health and safety . Moreover , I decided to join college and wants to complete Occupational health and safety course . Hence , for getting hands-on experience, I am looking for safety job.

Beside this, I am applying numerous jobs on linked in but nobody is responding to my application . I really need your help in finding a job or you can give me advice how I can find it .

I shall be very thankful to you

Warm Regards

Navpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why you are looking for a new job, describing the desired role, and asking for help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention wanting a 'safety job' for 'hands-on experience,' you could have elaborated more on the specific type of environment or industry you are targeting to make the request more personal and effective. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the depth of information could be increased to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your train of thought. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Hence' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'Beside this' (which should be 'Besides this'). The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing is more precise. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different parts of your request.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly. You use relevant terminology such as 'distribution center,' 'occupational health and safety,' and 'hands-on experience.' There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'get more involve' (should be 'involved') and 'applying numerous jobs' (should be 'applying for'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precision in your word usage. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'Currently, I worked' (should be 'am working' or 'was working') and 'wants to complete' (should be 'want to complete'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on consistent tense usage and proofreading for small mechanical errors.

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