Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Najmin,

I hope you are fine. I am writing this letter for helping me to find a new work, because I am so happy to heard that you are working in an international company.

First of all, I would like to explain the reason about a founding another employment is that I completed my MBA degree. Although I have a good job as a supervisor in the restaurant , I want a field job related my study to gain a work experience and knowledge about the business industry.

I would like to have a work which related my education or a tier job that help me to a getting PR in the Canada. If I have a experience as a business related worker I gain my point to achieve a my permit for the Canada.

I really appreciate If you could help me to found a particular job that I want to go in my future. As you already have a many contact in several company also you are a manager. So, if you could give me information what I have to do and how to apply which really assist me to getting new job.

Hoping tio hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,

Siddikabanu Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: explaining the reason for the job search, describing the desired role, and requesting assistance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited by grammatical errors, which occasionally make the specific details, such as the 'tier job' or the connection to Canadian PR, slightly confusing. Despite these issues, the purpose of the letter is clear, and the reader understands the request for help. To reach a higher band, ensure that the explanation of the job requirements is more precise and clearly linked to the friend's professional background.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. There is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as the phrase 'the reason about a founding another employment is that'. While the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate, which helps the overall structure of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the message, but it is somewhat repetitive and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. For example, 'founding another employment' should be 'finding another job', and 'a tier job' is unclear. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'a experience' instead of 'experience'. While the student attempts to use more formal business-related vocabulary, the inaccuracies occasionally impede the precision of the message. A wider range of natural collocations would improve the score significantly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('a getting PR', 'a experience'), subject-verb agreement, and prepositional errors ('related my study' instead of 'related to my study'). While these errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction, particularly the correct use of articles and prepositions, and ensure that verb forms are consistent.

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