Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear jophy,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my concern regarding my future life.

To begin with, I am looking for a new job . I am currently working as Accountant in H& M enterprise. Moreover, the working sector is amazing there but they are not providing any continuation in that sector, means they are going to shut down their business in next few months. Furthermore, my financial condition is little bit bad as early so I need a job. For example, I took education loan to pursue my studies, there is no way to pay back if i didn't make it they will surrender my house.

Additionally, I have experience is Administrative sector because I worked as executive member in W&B. I am looking for a accounting job that will be more suitable for me. I know that I am troubling you. However, am sorry because my condition is too bad. Do you know any company still having hiring now?. Could let me know if you see any opportunities.

I hope this message finds you well. Thank you for your valuable time and consideration towards this issue. I look forward for your response.

Sincerely,

Riya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why you are looking for a new job, describing the desired role, and asking for help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, although it leans slightly towards a formal business tone in parts. The ideas are relevant, though the explanation regarding your financial situation and the loan is a bit repetitive and could be more concisely expressed to allow for more detail about the specific type of job you are seeking. Overall, the task requirements are met effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping the explanation of your current situation and the request for help more distinctly. The flow between sentences is generally clear, though some phrasing, such as 'I know that I am troubling you', disrupts the natural progression of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'enterprise', 'administrative sector', and 'opportunities'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'working sector' instead of 'industry' or 'field', and 'financial condition is little bit bad' which is informal and imprecise. There are also minor errors in word formation, such as 'I have experience is Administrative sector'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise professional terminology and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('as Accountant', 'in Administrative sector'), subject-verb agreement issues, and awkward phrasing ('there is no way to pay back if i didn't make it'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some inconsistencies with capitalization and spacing. The errors do not significantly impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score.

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