Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Subject:request to friend about finding new job .

Dear Raman,

I hope you are doing well.Actually , I am looking a new job beacuse I find skill job which can help me in my future to get permanent resident in Canada.

I think that there are lot of job are available which can help to make experience such as manger , painter and work in construction. However, I like to get job in childcare which is more beneficial in future for me . In addition to this , I have dream to work in childcare because I love child .

I have request in front of you that you help me to find job because you have lot of experience and you live here from many times

I hope that you will help me to get job .

Yours sincerely,

Kamalpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining the reason for the job search, describing the desired role, and asking for help. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. The explanation regarding the job search is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. While the purpose is clear, the brevity prevents a fully developed response, leading to a lower score in this criterion. To improve, you should expand on your reasons and provide more specific details about your skills or the type of childcare environment you are interested in to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive answer.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter has a basic structure with an opening, body, and closing. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'I have request in front of you'. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to separate the different points of the task. The progression of ideas is logical, but the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel somewhat disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of transition words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'specifically' to connect your sentences more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'job' and 'help'. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'I find skill job' (likely meaning 'skilled job') and 'I have dream to work' (should be 'I have a dream of working'). The phrase 'you live here from many times' is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you need to use a broader range of vocabulary related to employment and professional goals, and ensure that your word choices are grammatically and contextually accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter. Common issues include missing articles ('looking a new job', 'get permanent resident'), incorrect verb forms ('I find skill job'), and punctuation errors (spaces before commas). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. The errors occasionally make the meaning slightly difficult to follow, such as in the sentence 'I have request in front of you'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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