Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear john

I hope you are doing well

I am writing regarding your help needed for searching any relevant job opportunities for me . I am looking for a job in my field and it would be grateful if could provide some options.

I have recently completed my Master’s from Toronto University. Therefore i wanted to pursue my professional career journey while living in Canada .

I have heard from my family and friends who are at great positions and earning well in finance field .

As per my interest , i would like to have job in finance field. I had completed my

MBA in financial and management analytics . Hence , I am looking to have job in banking sector . I already applied for job position’s in some of the Canadian banks .

I got to know that you are working in RBC bank as a bank teller . I would be appreciated if you could help me with reference required from someone working in similar banks . I hope you could able to provide me your referral to get this job .

I look forward for your prompt response.

Yours sincerely

Harleen kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: explaining the reason for the job search, describing the desired role, and asking for assistance. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, although it leans slightly formal at times. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the mention of the finance field and the MBA. To improve, you could provide more specific details about the type of role you are seeking within the banking sector to better demonstrate your goals. Overall, the task is fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the request for help. You use some cohesive devices like 'Therefore', 'Hence', and 'As per my interest', though some of these feel slightly mechanical or forced. The referencing is generally clear, although the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different stages of your request.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'professional career journey', 'financial and management analytics', and 'prompt response'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'at great positions' (should be 'in great positions') and 'I would be appreciated' (should be 'I would appreciate'). Additionally, there is some repetition of the word 'job' and 'field'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied synonyms for these common terms would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('in finance field' should be 'in the finance field'), pluralization ('position’s' should be 'positions'), and verb forms ('I hope you could able to' should be 'I hope you will be able to'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several instances of spaces before commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band score.

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