Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Rohit,

I hope you are doing well, I am writing this email to discuss for a new job .

First of all, i want to let you know why i decided to look for a new job. As you know, currently I am working in a burger king and it is very pressurized job and physically tough. So i want any job which require less physical tasks.

Now, i want a job in which i am interested,as I really feel passionate to serve older people because it gives me a peace of mind and also this job is not very stressful.

Moreover, as you working in a healthcare field and you have lot of experience. So i want you to refer me in your company to hire as a healthcare worker. I would be very grateful if you could help me. Thank you

Kind regards,

Ravneet Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining the reason for leaving, describing the desired job, and asking for help. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the overall score. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the description of the desired job could be expanded with more specific details about the type of healthcare environment or specific tasks. To improve, ensure you expand on your points to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive response to each prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the reason for the change to the desired role and finally the request for assistance. Paragraphing is present, though the structure is quite basic. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', and 'So', but they are somewhat repetitive and mechanical. The flow between sentences is generally clear, but the letter would benefit from a wider variety of linking words and more sophisticated transitions to improve the overall cohesion of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. You rely on basic descriptors like 'very pressurized' and 'physically tough'. There are also some minor collocation errors, such as 'discuss for a new job' (should be 'discuss my search for a new job') and 'refer me in your company' (should be 'refer me to your company'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to employment and healthcare, and focus on using more natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including punctuation issues (e.g., 'Dear Rohit, I hope...'), capitalization errors (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'), and article usage ('a burger king', 'a healthcare field'). Additionally, there are minor errors in verb tense and preposition usage, such as 'as you working' instead of 'as you work'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy score.

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