Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Friend,

Sub: A request for a new job

hello Sattvic, I looking for a new job space, can you please help me for the accounting role in your corporate company. some references is most important with your hand to hand document. Also previous job duties in, I am working as an account executive in United Kingdom Team. also client basis accounting firm, as per my work duties- Handle payments of suppliers of POS system through, suppliers and bank reconciliation, bank posting, accrual reports, synergy credit note reconciliation, i have knowledge for how to download the website of other bank like sentender, Amex card any other credit card statement downloading. i know in your companies vacancy, just see in social group of Linkdin, indeed work application, so I need a professional and personal growth in my job. so, please find a good & very comparative conduct team with find out my same work for reference. just, I humble request to you for a new and good criteria in your company. thank you or the carefully listening for me.

Your faithfully,

Ashish

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for looking for a job, the desired role, and the request for help. However, the development of these ideas is hindered by significant clarity issues. While the intent is clear, the explanation of the 'kind of job' is somewhat muddled by a list of technical duties that lacks context. The tone is inconsistent, shifting between a formal business request and an informal letter to a friend. To improve, ensure that the purpose of the letter is clearly stated in a natural, cohesive manner rather than relying on fragmented lists of job responsibilities.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, appearing as a single block of text. There is a lack of logical progression between ideas; for example, the transition from the greeting to the job request and then to the list of duties is abrupt. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'also' and 'so' to connect unrelated thoughts. The letter would benefit significantly from clear paragraphing—one for the opening/reason, one for the job description, and one for the request—to guide the reader through the message.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for the context of a letter to a friend. Phrases like 'Sub: A request for a new job' and 'comparative conduct team' are unnatural and suggest a misunderstanding of register. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'corporate company' (redundant) and 'hand to hand document' (unclear meaning). While the student attempts to use professional terminology related to accounting, the lack of control over collocations and basic sentence structure makes the writing difficult to follow at times.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('I looking', 'some references is'), article usage, and sentence construction. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to parse. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent capitalization and comma splices. The student relies on simple structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity. Focusing on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—is essential for improvement.

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