Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Monil,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to let you know that I am currently looking for a new career opportunity in the Cybersecurity field. I have just finished my bachelor's degree in the same field. I have experience for 6 months as an intern with Adani Group.

Currently, I am looking for an entry-level job as a Cybersecurity consultant in Canada. You have been working with Apple Inc. for 6 years as a senior manager; can you please help me find a new job at Apple Inc. or can you please provide me with a reference at your current company? I have experience with firewalls, which play a vital role keep secure company's sensitive data secure. I have attached my updated resume and cover letter below.

I hope you will help me to find my first job. Thank you for your attention. I expect a positive response from your side within 7 days.

Take care

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained your motivation for seeking a new job, described the specific role you are targeting, and made a direct request for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, although the closing sentence, 'I expect a positive response from your side within 7 days,' is overly formal and sounds more like a business demand than a request to a friend. To improve, ensure the tone remains consistent throughout the letter to maintain the persona of a friendly correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task, which helps the reader follow your narrative. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Currently' and 'I have attached' to link your sentences. However, the transitions between paragraphs could be smoother to improve the flow. The use of paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure is easy to follow. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using subject-specific terms like 'Cybersecurity field,' 'entry-level job,' and 'firewalls' correctly. There are some minor issues with collocation and phrasing, such as 'experience for 6 months' (should be 'experience of 6 months') and 'keep secure company's sensitive data secure' (which is redundant and grammatically awkward). While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Focus on learning more natural collocations and idiomatic expressions to enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'I have experience for 6 months' is incorrect, and the sentence 'firewalls, which play a vital role keep secure company's sensitive data secure' contains a significant error in verb structure. Additionally, the punctuation in the final paragraph is slightly stiff. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct placement of adjectives and adverbs.

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