Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jason,

Hi Jason, hope you are doing well. I was planning to write a letter to you from so long, however i was busy in preparing my exams. But now my exams are over and I got off from the school for two months, so i was planning to get a job so earn money.

I want to earn money because my parents anniversary is coming in November so I am planning to give them surprise party and invite all our relatives for get together. To organize a good party, I need your help to get job in your restaurant because I always to learn about customer services . I really feel that by working in restaurant I can not only earn money but also can learn about customer services and later with the help of this service I can able to expand my skills.

Hope you will help me to get this job !

Your loving friend,

Lovepreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining why you are looking for a job, describing the desired role, and asking for help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention wanting to learn about customer service, you could have elaborated more on why this specific skill is important to you or why you chose your friend's restaurant specifically. The letter is clear and the purpose is well-defined, but adding a bit more detail to your explanations would help you reach a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is generally easy to follow, and there is a logical progression from your current situation to your request for help. You use basic cohesive devices like 'however', 'but', and 'so' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is contained in one block, which makes it look cluttered. To improve, you should separate your introduction, the explanation of your situation, and your request into distinct paragraphs. Additionally, some transitions are a bit repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'so' to connect clauses.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some relevant phrases like 'customer services' and 'expand my skills'. However, the range is somewhat limited and there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'get off from the school' (should be 'time off school') and 'from so long' (should be 'for so long'). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to employment and personal goals rather than relying on simple, repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a good start. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I was planning to write a letter to you from so long' and 'I can able to expand'. Additionally, there are issues with punctuation and capitalization, such as the lowercase 'i' used for the first-person pronoun. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy of your writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms will help improve your score.

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