Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear rohan,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to inform you that I am finding a job related to my field of study.

As you know I was doing a customer service job in a local company with basic salary for surviving a while, However now I want to continue my carrier with field job as I did office administration course.

Moreover, multinational companies are investing and growing their businesses in our city which influence me a lot to apply in them for a well reputable job with high package of salary.

Apart from this, even I know that you are a market analysis manager in one of the biggest firm so I am requesting you please help me out either provide a reference to me in your company or either ask you other colleges to find me a office admin job in somewhere else. I will be waiting for your response and hoping you to take it in a positive way.

Thank you,

Kamal shammi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for seeking a new job, the desired role, and the request for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, although it leans slightly formal. The ideas are relevant, though the explanation of why you are looking for a new job could be more personal and detailed to better fit the 'letter to a friend' format. You have clearly stated your goal of moving into office administration, which provides a clear focus for the reader. To improve, ensure that the connection between your current situation and your future goals is more explicitly linked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Apart from this' to transition between ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural in a personal letter. The referencing is generally clear, though the flow between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format, helping the reader follow your train of thought easily. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words that sound more conversational.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'multinational companies' and 'market analysis manager'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'basic salary for surviving a while' instead of 'a modest salary to get by' and 'high package of salary' instead of 'a competitive salary package'. Additionally, 'field job' is vague in this context. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'I am finding a job' should be 'I am looking for a job', and 'which influence me a lot' should be 'which has influenced me'. There are also issues with article usage ('a office admin job' should be 'an office admin job') and prepositional errors ('apply in them' should be 'apply to them'). While the meaning remains clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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