Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Rohan,

I hope you are doing good, I am writing this letter to explain you that I am looking for a Security Guard job. As you know that this time I am financially unstable and I want a startup. There are lot of expenses like my rent, grocery and phone bills.

I have Security Guard License but due to of no reference I am unable to find a job for me in this field. Apart from that, this job can open lot of opportunities for me and I am physically strong too. All these qualities make me perfect for this role. I am applying in Transworld security, you told me that you have worked here before. If I get your reference there are higher chances of getting this job. You even got employer of the year in this company. As it is my dream job and for so long am trying to get it.

Thank you for understanding my situation.

Best Regards,

Tahalpreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining the reason for the job search, describing the desired role, and requesting assistance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why you are looking for a job is brief, and the description of the 'kind of job' is restricted to a specific role (Security Guard) rather than describing the nature of the work or the environment you are seeking. To improve, you should expand on your motivations and provide more descriptive detail about your professional aspirations to fully satisfy the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, and the progression of ideas is generally clear. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Apart from that' and 'As you know', to link your thoughts. However, the transitions between sentences can feel a bit mechanical or abrupt. For example, the jump from discussing your financial situation to your license is quite sudden. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences flow more naturally into one another to create a more cohesive narrative.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'financially unstable' and 'opportunities'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'I want a startup' (which usually refers to a new business venture) and 'due to of no reference'. These errors occasionally hinder the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and idiomatic expressions related to job hunting and professional communication to make your writing sound more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I hope you are doing good' (should be 'well'), 'explain you' (should be 'explain to you'), and 'I am applying in Transworld' (should be 'to'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. Increasing your control over basic grammar and proofreading for small errors will significantly improve your score.

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