Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear: my love friend

I write this letter to explain to you the importance of get a new job I really need new job because I’m going to destroy and i don’t have a money for living you know my situation, I search or I looking for a job in my domain and what i love im passionate about fashion i search for job like stylist or sales associate in a clothing store.. please can you help me to find a job if you are interested.

Thank you so much

Your friend 🤍.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 93 words. While you have addressed all three bullet points—explaining the need for a job, describing the desired role, and asking for help—the ideas are severely under-developed. The explanation of why you need a job is vague, and the description of the desired role lacks detail. To improve, you must expand on your points by providing specific examples or context, which will help you meet the length requirement and demonstrate a more comprehensive response to the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, appearing as a single block of text. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together, making the flow of the letter feel disjointed. While the purpose of the letter is identifiable, the progression of ideas is limited by the brevity of the text. To improve, you should organize your letter into distinct paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for each bullet point, and a concluding paragraph. Using transition words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would also help connect your sentences more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express your ideas clearly. Phrases like 'I really need new job' and 'I search or I looking for a job' show a limited range and some inaccuracies in word choice and grammar. You rely on simple, high-frequency words. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to employment, such as 'career opportunities', 'professional experience', or 'vacancies', and focus on using these words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'importance of get a new job' (should be 'getting'), 'I’m going to destroy' (incorrect usage), and 'i don’t have a money' (article error). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and the proper use of articles. Practicing the construction of complex sentences using relative clauses or conditional structures will also help improve your score.

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