Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

hi meez how are hope doing well moez i tell you something i want join new job because my old job is not more benifits and not good salary moeez i want you check my new job i am very expert in sales operation manager and other kindly you help me and please find good job this occupation and the job good benifets like good salarys and medical evertthing provide company and annaul leave also and more benifits kindly help me to find good job i hope you understand kindly check good company like internation companies because these company provide good salary and provide everything like my son educations and health also my fine and you also working in good company and you also check your company if your company need worker than you share my cv to hr i hope you under stand i am very thankful brother ,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the task instructions. The student explains why they are looking for a new job ("my old job is not more benifits and not good salary"), describes the kind of job they want ("sales operation manager... good salarys and medical evertthing provide company and annaul leave"), and asks the friend for help ("kindly you help me and please find good job"). Although the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack deeper development, all parts of the prompt are addressed. The tone is informal, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend, though the lack of paragraphing limits full task extension. Overall, it achieves a band 5.0 level as it addresses all parts of the task, even though the development is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter is written entirely as a single, continuous block of text without any paragraph breaks, which heavily impacts coherence. There is a lack of logical progression and clear paragraphing. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused; the student relies on repetitive phrasing such as "kindly help me" and "and provide everything" to link clauses, creating a run-on sentence effect. While the intent of each section is understandable, the overall organization is faulty and mechanical. This corresponds to a band 4.0 descriptor, as information and ideas are not arranged cohesively into clear paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently circling around terms like "job", "salary", "benifits", and "company". There are noticeable spelling errors throughout the text, including "benifits" for benefits, "evertthing" for everything, "annaul" for annual, and "internation" for international. The student attempts to use less common occupational terms such as "sales operation manager", but overall, the lexical range is limited and minimally adequate. Word choice is frequently inaccurate, causing some strain for the reader. This performance aligns with band 4.0 descriptors due to the basic vocabulary and frequent spelling errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple clauses strung together with coordinating conjunctions like "and" and run-on structures without proper punctuation or capitalization. There is a near-total absence of complex sentence forms, and basic grammatical rules are frequently broken, such as missing auxiliary verbs ("how are hope doing well" and "i want join new job") and incorrect word forms. Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation cause significant difficulty for the reader and distort meaning in places. This corresponds to a band 4.0 score, characterized by a very limited range of structures and frequent errors.

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