Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

dear sir,

im writing a letter to my friend regarding found new job.i hope u are doing well .

the main reason us that ny current job hs very long workout and long working hours in really exhausted thats work . i have no enough time for my personal life and also my family members.moreover there are few opportunitiesfor permotion soni feel that it is tine for me make changes and improve ny career .

i would like to finding new job in a health care sector because i have graduated in bsc nursing field and i have lot of experience regarding children carre management.i jave a nursing background and i have intresting in poor helping people. i learn more skills dure to my job .

as u know many people in this field ,i would really appreciate it if u could help me find ne a suitable job .if u hear about any vacancies please let me know.i can send u to cv as well t shall v very thankful to you

best wishes

sinranjit kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The candidate addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. They successfully explain why they are looking for a new job by mentioning long working hours, exhaustion, a lack of personal time, and limited promotion opportunities. They describe the kind of job they want by specifying a role in the healthcare sector, specifically utilising their BSc Nursing background and experience in childcare management. Finally, they appropriately ask their friend for help by requesting assistance in finding a vacancy. However, the tone is inconsistent with the prompt's instruction to write to a friend, as it opens with 'dear sir,' and the closing name 'sinranjit kaur' lacks a friendly sign-off. Despite this register slip, all content requirements are covered adequately, placing the response at Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing, as it is presented almost as a single dense block of text, which hinders readability. Although there is a logical progression moving from the reason for leaving to the desired job and finally to the request for help, cohesive devices are basic and sometimes mechanical, such as the repeated use of 'and' or simple sequencing. Referencing and punctuation are also problematic, for instance writing 'ny current job hs' and starting sentences without capitalization. The overall arrangement shows an attempt at a coherent structure, but paragraphing and cohesion are faulty, warranting a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but heavily restricted by spelling and word choice errors. The candidate attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'health care sector', 'nursing background', and 'vacancies', but these are undermined by frequent lexical inaccuracies, such as 'found new job' instead of 'finding a new job', 'workout' instead of 'workload', 'permotion', and 'intresting in poor helping people'. These errors cause occasional difficulty for the reader, although communication remains generally clear enough to grasp the intended meaning. This performance fits the descriptors for Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple and basic complex sentences that frequently contain serious errors. There are persistent mistakes with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'i have no enough time', 'i would like to finding', 'i can send u to cv as well t shall v very thankful', and missing capitalisation throughout the response. Punctuation is largely neglected, and spacing errors (e.g., missing spaces after commas and periods) are common. Because frequent errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader, the grammar aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

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