Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Ram,

I am writing to ask for a favour from you. You can help me in the most possible way because you work as a job recruiter.

I work at a convenience store as a store supervisor. Although I am earning good, I am looking for a job which can pay me more. My parents told me that they want to stay with me in Canada. As a result, there would be increase in my fiancial responsibilities. Also, I am open to work for two jobs at a same time.

According to my experience in this business, I can work for any kind of a store. In addition, I am able to work for other departments too. For instance, I can easily work in a stocking divison. Furthermore, I am very quick and accurate with calculation. So, It would be beneficial for any organization.

I would appreciate it if you could help me to find a new job. I firmly believe that due to your job, It would not be difficult for you to check vacancies for supervisor's positions.

I look forward to hearing from you regarding my request. I hope to get a quick and positive response. See you soon!

Yours sincerely,

Meet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 8.0

The response covers all three bullet points from the prompt effectively and in appropriate detail. You successfully explain why you are looking for a new job, noting that your parents want to stay with you in Canada, which increases your financial responsibilities and desire for higher earnings. You also describe the kind of job you would like to have, mentioning your experience as a store supervisor and your ability to handle stocking divisions and calculations. Finally, you clearly ask your friend Ram for help in finding a vacancy. The tone is suitably informal and friendly, fitting the letter format well. All parts of the task are fully addressed, showing a clear purpose throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The letter is logically organised with a clear beginning, middle, and end. Each paragraph focuses on a distinct theme, such as your current situation, your skills and preferences, and the request for assistance. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices are generally used well, with connectors like 'Although', 'As a result', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' linking sentences together smoothly. Referencing throughout the text is clear, ensuring that the reader can easily follow your narrative from your initial greeting to your closing sign-off.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms related to employment and retail, such as 'job recruiter', 'store supervisor', 'fiancial responsibilities', and 'organization'. However, there are some noticeable slips in word choice and spelling, such as 'earning good' instead of 'earning well' or 'earning a good living', and 'fiancial' instead of 'financial'. You attempt less common lexical items, but occasional minor inaccuracies prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Overall, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly without impeding communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, featuring conditional and subordinate clauses such as 'Although I am earning good, I am looking for a job which can pay me more.' There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips present, including 'open to work for two jobs at a same time' instead of 'at the same time', 'work for any kind of a store', and a punctuation error with 'So, It would be beneficial'. Despite these errors, the majority of your sentences are understandable, and the grammatical issues do not significantly impede communication.

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