Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Deer Priya,

I hope you are doing great in your life! I am writing this letter to ask you a favor. Currently, I am unemployed and looking for a new job. I was working In a restaurant as a server for about 5years, everything was going good there but then I relize that even giving my best performance and being best employee of the year, I not getting any promotion or raise. It makes me feel unvalued and I decided to quit that job.

I am looking for a company that has a growth plan for me and I can start with the same as server position but I can get promotion or raise as a apriciation peice.

I know you are currently employed as a company where gwoth for everyone is the most important considered thing. I would appreciate if you can give me a referral to your company or arrange a meeting with your manager. I promise I would not let you down.

Your lovely friend

Neha kumari

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: you explain that you left because there was no promotion or pay rise, describe wanting a server role with opportunities to progress, and ask Priya for a referral or a meeting with her manager. The reason for changing jobs is supported with relevant detail, including your five years of service and recognition as employee of the year. Your request is also clear and appropriately directed to a friend. To make the ideas more fully developed, specify what kind of company or advancement you hope for—for example, a route into supervisory work—and explain briefly why Priya’s workplace appeals to you. This would make the description of your preferred job more precise rather than relying mainly on the general idea of growth.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The message follows a sensible sequence: you explain your situation, describe the job you want, and then make your request. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “Currently” and “I would appreciate” guide the reader. The letter is therefore coherent overall. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. The long sentence beginning “I was working In a restaurant” joins several points with “but then” and “and,” making the explanation feel crowded. The transition from your preferred role to Priya’s company could also be clearer. Use shorter sentences for the job history and add a linking phrase explaining why her company seems suitable; this would make progression more consistently natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “promotion,” “raise,” “referral,” and “manager.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision and sometimes make the reader pause: “Deer,” “relize,” “apriciation peice,” and “gwoth.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “growth for everyone is the most important considered thing” and “as a apriciation peice.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than translating ideas word by word. For example, you could say that you want “clear opportunities for career progression” and hope for “a salary increase in recognition of your performance.” Proofreading spelling and choosing conventional workplace phrases would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the reader can generally follow the message. However, errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit accuracy. For example, “I not getting any promotion” needs a finite verb (“I was not getting”), while “I decided to quit” shifts tense awkwardly after the past account. In “I can start with the same as server position,” the grammatical relationship between the ideas is unclear; a clearer form is “I could start in the same position as a server.” The sentence beginning “I know you are currently employed” also needs a more complete construction. Practise checking each clause for a subject and correctly formed verb, and use full stops to control long sentences.

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