Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Aman,

How are you? I hope you are doing well. It has been a long time since we talked, and I hope everything is going great. I am writing this letter to apprise you that I need a new job in the Vancouver area.

First of all, I would like to tell you that I have resigned from my old security job. The main reason for this is that they always give me a night schedule, which is far from my house, and it takes too much time. Therefore, I decided to change my job.

However, I would like to mention that I need a security job in Vancouver because I have experience in this job, and this job has better wages than other jobs.

Finally, could you please assist me in finding a security job? I would really apprcite that if you let me know any security opportunities open in the Vancouver area.

I look forward to hearing from you. Stay safe and look after yourself.

Best wishes,

Kulveer Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points and maintains a clear, appropriate purpose. You explain that you left your security job because of the night schedule and the distance from home, identify the type and location of work you want, and directly ask Aman to tell you about openings. These details make the request relevant and understandable. To strengthen the response further, develop the preferred job description and reasons a little more: for example, specify the kind of schedule or workplace you are seeking, rather than mainly repeating that you want security work in Vancouver. The explanation of why you left is clear, though the letter could connect your preference for a new role more explicitly to those difficulties.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The ideas progress in a clear order: a friendly opening, an explanation of your resignation, your preferred work, and a request for help, followed by an appropriate closing. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and signposts such as “First of all,” “However,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the letter. The overall organisation is effective, although these transitions can feel somewhat formulaic, and “However” does not express a strong contrast between the preceding and following ideas. You could make the flow more natural by linking the job preference directly to the reason for leaving, and by varying or reducing explicit sequencing phrases. The references to the job and Vancouver remain clear throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes some less common choices, such as “apprise” and “assist,” while the main message remains easy to understand. However, some wording is either overly formal for a friendly letter or repetitive: “apprise you” sounds formal, and “security job” and “job” recur several times. There is also a spelling error in “apprcite,” which should be “appreciate.” More precise, natural collocations would improve flexibility and control—for instance, describe the work schedule as “night shifts” and refer to “vacancies” or “open positions.” Aim to use varied but conversational language suited to writing to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the reason clause in “The main reason for this is that…” and the result link “Therefore, I decided to change my job.” Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly, and the letter’s basic sentence control is sound. Some grammatical patterns are less natural or need more precise control. In “they always give me a night schedule,” the present tense is understandable, but “they always assigned me night shifts” would fit the past job more naturally. The phrase “I would really appreciate that if you let me know” also combines patterns awkwardly; use “I would really appreciate it if you could let me know.” Further practice with conditional requests and tense consistency would help make the range more consistently accurate.

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