Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Smith,

i hope you are in a good spirit and health. I am writing this letter to ask you find a job.i have completed my graduation a while ago.I am free nowadays i am trying to find a job somewhere.

I am writing to ask you if you could help me find a job in your city.you are in a good post in a multi national company for a long time .I hope you could help me as you know my pynanshiol condition is very poor .My father is retired government officer his pension is very low that is not enough for our daily experience.

furthermore,I would be thankful to your if you talk to your

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You give a relevant reason for seeking work: you say you are currently free and that your family’s finances are difficult because your father’s pension is low. You also ask your friend to help, so the purpose of the letter is partly clear. However, the task asks you to describe the kind of job you would like, and this is not addressed. The request for help is also unfinished at “if you talk to your,” leaving the reader unsure what action you want. The response is 33 words below the required minimum, which limits how fully you can explain your reasons and preferences. Address all three points and complete the request with specific details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas are broadly connected: you introduce your job search, explain your financial circumstances, and then begin asking for assistance. Phrases such as “furthermore” show an attempt to link points. However, the letter is presented as one continuous block, and the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas run together, for example, “I am free nowadays i am trying to find a job somewhere.” The final sentence is incomplete, so the letter does not reach a clear closing or finish its request. Use separate paragraphs for your reason, preferred job, and request, and connect complete sentences with clear punctuation and appropriate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment and personal circumstances, including “graduation,” “multi national company,” “retired,” and “pension.” These choices help communicate the general situation. However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “in a good spirit and health,” “good post,” and “daily experience”; the intended meanings are not always immediately clear. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “pynanshiol,” which weakens the reader’s confidence in the message. Aim for familiar, precise collocations and check spelling carefully. More specific vocabulary about the role you want—such as its duties, field, or working conditions—would also make the letter more informative.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes simple statements and an attempt at a more complex request, such as “I am writing to ask you if you could help me.” This shows some ability to form different sentence types. However, sentence boundaries and punctuation are often poorly controlled: “I am free nowadays i am trying to find a job somewhere” joins two independent ideas without suitable punctuation, and the final clause is incomplete. Capitalisation is inconsistent, and articles and sentence structure need attention in phrases such as “in a good post in a multi national company for a long time.” Use full stops to separate complete thoughts, capitalise the start of each sentence, and reread each sentence to ensure it has a complete structure.

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