Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Friend,Aslam o alkum,

Hope so you are in good health and wealth.I want to talk you some personal problems because you are my good friend but first of all what's about you and your family you are in good condition.I want to ask you something.You have any kind of job kindly tell me beacuse my condition in now a days is not good i look many jobs but i wish i want tobe shopkepper because i have good experience in it my friends shop in village i want to open also.You are settled in city and you have too much friends you are my last hope that's why i want to ask you for my help,in my village i have opened a shop but it could not gave me a possitive response but i want yo settled in city with my family.Kindly ask to any one to gave me any kind of help in buissness.Thanks for your hospility and take care of yourself.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by explaining that your current shop has not been successful, describing your interest in shopkeeping, and asking your friend to use their city contacts to help. These details make the request relevant and personal. However, the reason for seeking a new job is not fully clear: you mention financial difficulty and a poor response to your village shop, but do not explain what kind of work or income you now need. The preferred job is also somewhat mixed with a plan to open another shop. Clarify whether you want employment in a shop or help establishing a business, and give a little more detail about the role you hope to find.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter contains the required ideas, and the sequence from greeting to personal circumstances, job preference, request, and closing is broadly understandable. However, most of the message is presented as one long block, so the reader has to work to identify where one point ends and another begins. Several ideas are joined with repeated forms such as “but,” “because,” and “and,” while transitions between your current business, your wish to move, and the request for help are not always clear. Use separate paragraphs for the reason, the job you want, and your request. Shorter sentences and clearer links such as “As a result” or “I would therefore appreciate it if…” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general situation, including “experience,” “shop,” “village,” “city,” and “business.” The reader can understand that you have run a shop and want your friend’s help. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “good health and wealth,” “my condition…is not good,” and “gave me a positive response.” Spelling errors, including “beacuse,” “shopkepper,” and “hospility,” also make the writing less clear and polished. Build a more precise set of phrases for employment and business, and check spelling and natural combinations before sending the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining your experience and asking your friend to use their contacts. However, these complex attempts are often faulty, and the response relies heavily on long strings of clauses rather than controlled sentence patterns. Examples include “You have any kind of job” and “it could not gave me,” where question structure and verb forms are inaccurate. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “my friends shop” and the run-on opening after “Dear Friend.” Use straightforward complete sentences first, then add a few accurately formed clauses. Check question word order, past-tense forms, and sentence boundaries.

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