Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Rohan,

Hope you are doing well. I am writing this to know you that i made a dicision that i am looking for a new job.

As you know am now am workin as logistics dispether. I am tired of that office environment and workin long hours siting on same place make my body more tired and unhealthy that leads to obesity.

Now i planing to find new job that can help to utilise my time so i can manage my work life balace, somthing that include's physical activities such as lift weights or walking. Take and example of jpb role, contraction worker maybe a warehouse assisoate.

I know that you are the right guy who can assist me to find this kind of employment that is suitble for my lifestyle. As you are used to work in such industries, you have linked and contacts likely to many chance i might be get a role in any job sector.

Kind Regards

Amandeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that long hours in an office are affecting your health, describe a more active role such as warehouse work, and ask Rohan to help you find employment. The purpose and friendly relationship are clear, and the letter includes an appropriate greeting and sign-off. The explanation of why you want to leave is relevant, but the preferred job is not fully defined: “contraction worker” and “warehouse assisoate” are examples rather than a clear description of the duties or conditions you seek. The request for help could also be more specific, such as asking Rohan to share vacancies or introduce you to a contact. These details would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall order: it introduces your decision, explains your current situation, describes the kind of work you want, and then asks your friend for assistance. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “As you know” and “Now” guide the reader through the message. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, particularly the transition from wanting physical activity to the examples of jobs, and the final sentence about Rohan’s contacts is difficult to follow. Organising the job preferences and the request into clearer, more direct sentences would improve progression. Overall, the structure is coherent, though cohesion and referencing are not consistently clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “logistics dispatcher,” “office environment,” “physical activities,” and “work-life balance,” so the reader can understand the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the letter harder to read, for example “dicision,” “dispether,” “assisoate,” and “suitble.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “utilise my time” and “linked and contacts likely to many chance.” Aim to learn accurate job-related terms and common collocations, and proofread spelling carefully. More precise wording for the type of work and the help you want would make your message clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason-and-result structure in “workin long hours … make my body more tired and unhealthy that leads to obesity.” However, errors in verb forms, sentence construction, and punctuation occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “I am writing this to know you” needs a different grammatical pattern, while “As you know am now am workin” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Now i planing” also needs a finite verb, and the final request contains several clauses that are not joined clearly. Practise complete sentence patterns and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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