Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Balkarn,

I hope you find this letter very well and having a wonderful day. After college you just lost , what are you doing these days , seems like too busy no text no call , everything fine?

Actually , I am looking new job as you know alreay before I was working in warehouse as a part time during college time.Unfortunately due to fire mostly employees had to quit their job and some of them transfer to other stores but now am still struggling to find a new job , however i also trying to find a job and drop resumes on many job-websites still no response.

As I knew you already working in superstore as a supervisor , it is humble request if you can reserve any postion for me , because these days it's very hard for me to survive here without money , lots of expenses are still on my shoulder, rember school time i shared my family situation , now they are my responsibility I have to care of my family , hopefully you will understand my situation and help me.

Lastly , I would be greatful if you can help me please. I will be wait for your response soon .

your loving ,

vishal kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main situation and give a reason for changing jobs: the warehouse fire meant employees had to leave or transfer, and you explain that you are still looking. You also ask Balkarn, who works as a supervisor, to help you find a position. However, the requested description of the kind of job you want is not really provided; asking for “any position” leaves this part unclear. The financial and family pressures add relevant context, but the ideas are repeated rather than developed into a clear account of what work would suit you. To strengthen the letter, specify the role, hours, or workplace you are seeking and make the request more direct and focused.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: greeting and personal check-in, explanation of your job search, then a request for help and a closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. However, the opening questions and the long middle paragraphs make the progression less clear, and several ideas are joined in extended sentences with commas, such as the account of the fire, transfers, and your job applications. Connectors such as “however” and “lastly” are used, but they do not always clarify the relationship between ideas, and the request is repeated at the end. Use shorter, clearly punctuated sentences and give each paragraph one main purpose to make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough everyday vocabulary to communicate the situation, including “warehouse,” “part time,” “supervisor,” “resumes,” and “expenses.” These details make the letter relevant and understandable. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “find this letter very well,” “reserve any postion for me,” and “drop resumes on many job-websites.” Spelling errors such as “alreay,” “rember,” and “greatful” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the message. Aim for natural phrases such as “I hope you’re doing well,” “recommend me for a vacancy,” and “submit applications through job websites,” and check spelling before sending.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences to explain the background and your circumstances. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter difficult to read. Examples include “I am looking new job,” “After college you just lost,” and “I will be wait for your response,” where verb forms or sentence construction are incomplete or incorrect. There are also problems with articles, tense, and punctuation, as in “during college time.Unfortunately” and the comma-heavy sentences. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then combine them with clauses using clear punctuation—for example, “I am looking for a new job because the warehouse closed after a fire.”

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