Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Hello my dear Best friend

i hope your are well and today iam telling you about my new job i want to do new job for a need because i neeed money money is more important in life for everyone so i decided i do a job that's job is Very Mostly impressive to me

do you need a job if you need a new job therefore you tell me and what would you like you job i get to you a advice you come with me and you do a job with me if you don't mind that's a good idea so i think my opinion you feel better if you feel better please contact With for more further information

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You make a basic attempt to explain your reason for changing jobs, saying you need money, and you ask your friend about work and suggest doing a job together. However, the main task is only minimally addressed: you do not describe the kind of job you want, and the request for help finding one is unclear because you mostly ask whether your friend needs a job. The response also contains 121 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 150. Develop each bullet point with specific details—for example, explain what is unsatisfactory about your current situation, name a type of role you would like, and directly ask your friend to look out for suitable vacancies or introduce you to someone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable attempt to move from explaining your reason for seeking work to discussing a possible job with your friend. However, the ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow. The repeated questions and phrases, such as “do you need a job” and “if you feel better,” do not clearly connect the points or guide the reader through the letter. Use separate paragraphs for your reason, the job you want, and your request for help. Simple linking phrases such as “I am looking because…,” “Ideally, I would like…,” and “Could you please…” would make the relationships between ideas clearer and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, but some meaning can be understood through familiar words such as “money,” “job,” and “friend.” The repeated use of “job” and “better” limits your ability to explain your plans precisely, while phrases such as “Very Mostly impressive” and “for more further information” are not natural in this context. Choose vocabulary that describes the work itself and your reason for changing jobs, such as “a full-time position,” “better pay,” or “a role that suits my skills.” Also check spelling and word forms, including “neeed” and “iam.” More accurate, varied wording would help you communicate the letter’s purpose more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate several ideas in connected sentences, and the reader can identify the general topic. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or joined in ways that make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “i decided i do a job” needs a clearer verb pattern, while “if you need a new job therefore you tell me” combines clauses incorrectly. There are also recurring problems with capitalization, sentence boundaries, and basic forms such as “i hope your are well.” Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then connect them with accurate conjunctions. For example: “I am looking for a new job because I need a higher income. Could you help me find a suitable position?”

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