Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have decided to look for a new job.

Write a letter to a friend. In your letter
• explain why you are looking for a new job.
• describe the kind of job you would like to have.
• ask your friend to help you find a job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear John,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you that I am looking for a new job.

As you know, currently I work as a buyer with "Siemens" company in Peterborugh. I have been working with this company for last 9 years and I have lots of memory with this place. Unfortunately, the management has decided to shut down the Peterborough plant.So, I am looking for a new opportunities.

As I completed my studies in Supply chain Management and have 9 years of experience in the same field. As a result, I would like to have job in the same field in. I would prefer white-collar job in logistics.For instance, I am too good in negotiations so that stream interset me the most.

John informed me that you are working with "Tiger Cat". It would be highly appreciated if you will put my reference. If possible could you please check with HR if your company is hiring for a Buyer.

In the meantime, I will keep applying to the job through linkedln and indeed and keep you posted.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Your Faithfully,

NJ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements clearly: you explain that the Peterborough plant is closing, describe your preference for a buyer or logistics role, and ask John to check with HR and recommend you. The reason for changing jobs is specific, and your experience and negotiation skills help support the type of work you want. The request is also appropriately polite. Some details could be developed more fully: for example, you could specify what kind of logistics or buying responsibilities you are seeking, or explain how John’s knowledge of the company could help. Overall, the purpose and position remain clear throughout, with relevant supporting information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear progression from the reason for your job search, to the role you want, and then to your request for help. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and phrases such as “As you know,” “As a result,” and “In the meantime” help connect ideas. This gives the response a coherent overall arrangement. However, some links are awkward or unclear: “As I completed my studies…” is left as a sentence fragment, while “As a result” does not connect smoothly to the following preference. The final paragraph about applying online is relevant but could be linked more directly to your request. More natural transitions and clearer sentence boundaries would make the cohesion less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for this familiar topic, including relevant terms such as “Supply chain Management,” “logistics,” “negotiations,” and “HR.” These choices make your experience and career interests understandable, and the tone is generally suitable for a letter to a friend. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural word choices and collocations, such as “lots of memory with this place,” “new opportunities,” and “put my reference.” Spelling errors in “Peterborugh,” “interset,” and “linkedln” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural professional expressions while keeping the friendly tone—for example, say that you have “many fond memories” and ask John to “refer” or “recommend” you.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple sentences and attempts at more complex structures, such as “Unfortunately, the management has decided to shut down the Peterborough plant” and the conditional request beginning “If possible.” The main message is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. “As I completed my studies…” is a dependent clause without a main clause, and “I would like to have job” is missing an article. Other examples include “for last 9 years,” “if you will put my reference,” and the punctuation break in “plant.So.” These show that sentence construction, articles, and verb patterns need more consistent control. Check each sentence for a complete main clause and review articles and conditional forms before sending.

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