Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building. You are frequently bothered by noise from your upstairs neighbour's apartment.

Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it is a problem for you.
• suggest a solution.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear raman,

i am writing this letter to you about a me situation.you create a noise pollution.

my daily routine this go work and coming a home evening.when i went home i feel very tired.your children loud a song or i was very irritated. create a noise brothered.

i suggest you understand own children.stop the loud song.

hoping a understand my talk and prompt respone

yours faithfully,

jaspreet kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address the main situation by saying that your neighbour’s children play loud music, and you explain that you feel tired after work and become irritated. You also make a request to stop the music, so the reader can identify your basic purpose. However, the task is only minimally addressed: the problem and its effect are very briefly described, and the proposed solution is limited to “stop the loud song,” without suggesting a practical arrangement such as keeping the volume down at certain times. The response contains 69 words, below the required 150, so important details and a fuller, polite request are missing. Develop each bullet point with specific explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the noise, describe your routine and reaction, then make a suggestion and close. The separate paragraphs help distinguish these stages, and the reader can follow the basic purpose despite some unclear wording. However, progression is very brief, and links between ideas are limited; for example, “my daily routine this go work and coming a home evening” does not clearly connect your workday to the noise problem. Add linking phrases such as “Because of this” or “As a result,” and organise the letter into a clear opening, explanation, request, and closing. This would make the relationships between your points easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “noise,” “tired,” “irritated,” and “suggest,” which communicates the general topic. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several inaccurate choices make the message difficult to understand. “Noise pollution” is too broad for this personal complaint, while “create a noise brothered” does not express the intended idea clearly. “Loud song” would be more naturally expressed as “loud music.” Build a more precise range for describing the disturbance and its impact, such as “the music carries into my apartment” and “it disrupts my rest.” Check spelling and word forms, especially “bothered” and “response,” to make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your response uses a few simple sentence attempts, such as “I am writing this letter to you” and “I feel very tired,” but sentence structures are very limited. Frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, articles, and punctuation sometimes distort meaning. For example, “my daily routine this go work and coming a home evening” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “your children loud a song” is missing a suitable verb. Capital letters are also needed at the start of sentences and in “I.” Practise building complete sentences with a subject and verb, such as “I come home in the evening after work, and the loud music makes it difficult to rest.” Then check articles and verb forms.

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