Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Alex,

Hey mate! How's life treating you? Hope everything is hunky-dory at your end. It has been ages since we last had a proper chat . First off,I am not trying to blame you however when i came back from my vacation trip i found my laptop edge broken which i think you might dropped it by mistake and it stopped working seems to have a broken part in it . I remember you asking me for the password of it to use for your office work.

That was a gift from my father which has been extremely special to me from day one since he gave it to me with his hard worked money . Considering my needs of a equipment my dad gifted it for the prepration of assignments and important test while i was studying . Nowadays, i can not work without it .

I hope you will show some gratitude and find me a repair shop . I will be more than happy if you compensate the amount of repair after its has been done upon your recommendation. I am eagerly waiting to hear from you.

will catch up soon,

Jaskaran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter covers all three required points: you identify the laptop as the damaged possession, explain that it was a gift from your father and useful for your studies and current work, and ask Alex to find a repair shop and pay the repair cost. These details make the purpose clear and keep the response relevant. However, some ideas are less fully explained than others. For example, “my laptop edge broken” does not clearly describe what part is damaged, and the request that Alex “show some gratitude” may sound accusatory rather than explaining calmly what action you expect. State the damage precisely and make the requested repair and payment arrangements explicit to strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a generally logical order: you open with a friendly greeting, describe the damage, explain the laptop’s personal importance, and then make a request. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “That was a gift from my father” connect the explanation to the possession. The progression is clear overall, though some links are awkward or unclear. The long sentence beginning “First off” combines the discovery, your guess about Alex, and the laptop’s condition, making the sequence harder to follow. The closing also shifts abruptly from the repair request to “will catch up soon.” Use shorter sentences and clearer transitions to make the letter’s flow more natural and controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of conversational expressions suited to writing to a friend, including “Hey mate,” “How’s life treating you?” and “catch up soon.” You also communicate the laptop’s personal value through phrases such as “extremely special to me.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “laptop edge broken,” “hard worked money,” and “show some gratitude.” “Vacation trip” is also redundant, while “hunky-dory” may feel overly casual for a letter about a valuable item being damaged. Choose more precise language for the damage and a tactful but direct expression of your request. These improvements would make your vocabulary more accurate and appropriate to the situation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “That was a gift from my father which has been extremely special to me” and “I will be more than happy if you compensate the amount of repair.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. In “you might dropped it,” the verb form should be “might have dropped it”; “it stopped working seems to have a broken part” needs a clearer sentence structure; and “after its has been done” contains an incorrect pronoun and verb form. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation, such as lowercase “i” and missing spaces after commas. Check verb patterns and divide long sentences into complete, well-punctuated units.

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