Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear parker,

Hope you are doing good, I want to thank you for take care of my apartment while I was on the trip. You managed everything in the house very well. However, I just found a broken ring in the room.

The ring was in the gold color and there was a red ruby on the top of it. Now the ring ruby is not on its palce and the metal piece is also broken. I understand that you did not do it intentionally, but you should have informed me about the situation.

The ring actually was a birthday present for my girlfriend, and it was very expensive. I saved two months of my salary to buy it for her. Her birthday is coming next week, I can not afford to buy new ring by that time. I want you to help me, if you pay me half price of the ring, I will be able to buy new ring by adding my savings into it. I hope you understand my situation and help me.

Kind regards

Dilbir Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you describe the ring and its missing ruby, explain that it was an expensive birthday gift for your girlfriend, and ask your friend to contribute half its price. The request is clear and supported by the detail that her birthday is next week and you cannot afford a replacement alone. Your tone is generally considerate, especially in acknowledging that the damage may not have been intentional. To make the ideas more fully developed, clarify what action you expect regarding the broken ring—for example, whether your friend should pay for a repair or contribute toward a replacement—and phrase the request in a way that invites discussion rather than sounding like a fixed demand.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear progression: you thank your friend, introduce the damage, describe the ring, explain its significance, and make a request. Paragraphing helps separate these stages, and linking expressions such as “However,” “I understand,” and “I hope” make the relationship between ideas easy to follow. The sequence from the ring’s condition to its importance and then to the proposed solution is particularly effective. To strengthen the flow further, connect the description and request more explicitly, and avoid abrupt shifts such as moving from “you should have informed me” directly to the ring’s sentimental value. A brief transition explaining how the damage affects your plans would make the progression even smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the situation clearly, including relevant terms such as “ruby,” “birthday present,” “salary,” and “half price.” The description gives the reader a basic picture of the ring, and the wording is generally understandable. However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “in the gold color” and “the ring ruby” do not sound idiomatic, while “broken ring” is repeated rather than varied. Spelling errors such as “palce” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural collocations and more precise descriptions, for example, “a gold ring set with a red ruby” and “the stone has come loose.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes a mix of simple and more developed sentences, such as “I understand that you did not do it intentionally” and the conditional request beginning “if you pay me half price.” Most meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “thank you for take care” needs a gerund after “for,” and “The ring actually was a birthday present” has an awkward verb construction. The conditional sentence also needs clearer punctuation and structure, while “I can not afford to buy new ring” is missing an article. Review verb patterns, articles, and punctuation around conditional clauses. More consistently accurate sentence forms would make the message smoother without requiring more complicated structures.

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