Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear friend,

I hope you are doing well and had a great time in my apartment during my absence. Unfortunately, after reach home I discoverd a broken cup from an expensive crockrey set which was imported. This situation found me both unacceptable and unhappy. It was in great color combination, dusty pink and white, which always gave a stand out look to that set.

This cups set matter the most to me, as there are some sentimental connections deeply connected to this. Whenever there was a sepecial event or to welcome guest I used that set to entertain the guest. I vividly remembered how many efforts I put to buy this one, like working overtime ignoring weekend to make money. As a consequence, I had it with consistent hard-work, but you made me turn down.

I thought you could look after my home and possesion like yours, but it had not been the case. I would therefore request you to pay th bills of broken item or give me the same set I had, depending what is possible. I hope this letter finds you well.

I look forward to hearing from you.

With regards,

Alice

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the broken cup from an imported crockery set, explain its sentimental and practical importance, and ask your friend either to pay for the damage or replace the set. The details about using it for special events and working overtime to afford it make your feelings clear. However, the importance is explained more fully than the requested action, and the request could be more tactful and specific—for example, clarify whether you expect the cost of one cup or a replacement set. The opening and closing are appropriate, though “Dear friend” is less personal than using your friend’s name. The response covers the task well, but some ideas need clearer development and precision.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you introduce the damage, explain why the crockery matters, and then make a request. Paragraphing supports this progression, and phrases such as “Unfortunately” and “I would therefore request” help signal the shifts. Some connections are less clear, however. “This situation found me both unacceptable and unhappy” does not express the relationship between the discovery and your reaction naturally, while “As a consequence” does not clearly connect your hard work to the friend’s responsibility. The final “I hope this letter finds you well” also repeats the friendly opening rather than advancing the closing. More precise referencing and smoother links between cause, feeling, and request would make the cohesion more flexible and less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for the situation, including “sentimental connections,” “vividly remembered,” “imported,” and “consistent hard-work.” These choices show an attempt to express personal significance rather than relying only on basic words. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “crockrey,” “sepecial,” “possesion,” and “th bills” should be corrected, and “This cups set matter the most to me” is not a natural way to describe its importance. Phrases such as “you made me turn down” and “great color combination” are also unclear or imprecise in context. Aim for accurate, natural collocations, such as “the set means a great deal to me” and “the cup was part of a matching set.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the explanation beginning “Whenever there was a special event” and the request sentence beginning “I would therefore request.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “after reach home I discoverd” needs a past-tense clause (“after I reached home, I discovered”), and “This cups set matter” has problems with number and subject–verb agreement. In “there are some sentimental connections deeply connected to this,” the structure is awkward and the reference is unclear. The sentence about working overtime also needs a clearer grammatical relationship between the effort and the purchase. More consistent tense control and carefully checked sentence construction would improve accuracy.

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