Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hi love.

How are you , hope so are you doing well . I returned home yesterday night and i saw that the antique picture of me and my grandpa was broke down . Which was very important to of me .On my last birthday one of my best friends gave me as a present , but now its broke down . I already went to many places but nobody can fix this . If you have any knowledge about please help me . Its not only picture for me but also a gift from my best friend .It has lights on the edges, which enhance the beauty of the picture as well as of the wall.

I request you if you are free please fix this .And give my happiness back .What was you doing on that time when its broken . because from past two months its very good and lightning was very good. So please fix this when you will get time .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: describing the item, explaining its importance, and requesting action. However, the tone is inconsistent and somewhat aggressive for a letter to a friend. The request for the friend to 'give my happiness back' and the accusatory question 'What was you doing on that time' are inappropriate for the context. While the task is addressed, the development of ideas is limited by the informal, slightly confrontational tone, which detracts from the communicative purpose of the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is disjointed. The transition between describing the item and asking the friend to fix it is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'So' and 'And' to start sentences. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when referring to the 'picture' versus the 'gift'. The overall progression of ideas is present but lacks the smooth transitions required for a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'broke down' are used incorrectly to describe a physical object (a better choice would be 'broken' or 'damaged'). There is an attempt to use descriptive language ('enhance the beauty', 'valuable possession'), but the overall range is limited. Word choice errors, such as 'hope so are you doing well' and 'knowledge about please help me', occasionally impede the clarity of the message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement ('What was you doing'), tense usage ('its broke down'), and sentence structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures prevents the text from reaching a higher band. The range of structures is limited to simple and compound sentences, with little evidence of complex grammatical forms.

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