Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Jatan,

I hope you are doing well and writing this in order to inform that last night you were at my apartment and I want to tell that my most precious thing that was alarm clock, gifted by my grandmother on my birthday last year. It is really beneficial for me because it was the last thing that I got from my grandmother and I keep this in my wardrobe to show this my most precious thing in my life and I saw that it got broke. And I was wondering that no one was at home except you and me. Respectfully, I think that maybe by mistake the item was broke by you. I would really appreciate if you can help me to rejuvenate this valuable thing that would be really beneficial for me to overcome my expressions by glowing back up or taking help from the factory, that can make this to reserve

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Thank you for your understanding. I hope you will understand.

You’re sincerely,

Sukhbir Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: describing the clock, explaining its importance, and requesting action. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The explanation of why the clock is important is repetitive, and the request for action is unclear due to awkward phrasing like 'rejuvenate this valuable thing' and 'overcome my expressions'. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the tone is occasionally inconsistent, and the lack of clarity in the final request hinders the overall effectiveness of the communication. To improve, ensure that your requests are specific and expressed in natural, standard English.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the abrupt transition in 'And I was wondering that no one was at home'. Paragraphing is also insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block, which makes it harder to follow. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the description, the explanation, and the request, and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and natural collocation. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'rejuvenate' to describe fixing a clock, 'expressions' instead of 'feelings' or 'emotions', and 'glowing back up' or 'reserve', which are unclear. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common collocations—for example, 'repair' or 'get fixed' instead of 'rejuvenate'—and ensure that your word choices accurately reflect the intended meaning in a formal or semi-formal context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'writing this in order to inform that last night you were at my apartment' (missing subject/object), 'it got broke' (incorrect passive voice), and 'that can make this to reserve' (incorrect verb usage). While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent and distract from the message. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the correct use of passive voice and verb tenses, and proofread carefully to avoid missing words or incorrect verb forms.

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