Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

history

go to the antique shop and find a similar one without getting any attention

Dear Annie,

I let you know that I have recently discovered my broken laptop and for that you have compensate me.

Lat week, when I went to Singapore for the business meeting I let you in for a few days, but I didn't imagine that behind my back you would break my MacBook. This might be an accident, while I returned home I found your apology letter with its broken display and some scratches over its outer body.

This pc stores some crucial files related to my business, which do not have any other back-up. Without that I wouldn't manage to deal with my upcoming projects hence their recovery is vital for my survival.

Although I was very disappointed when I saw it, I have some hope that one of your friend who is techsavvy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the laptop, explaining its importance, and requesting action. However, the response is incomplete as it cuts off mid-sentence at the end. The tone is somewhat aggressive and accusatory, which is not entirely appropriate for a letter to a friend, even in a conflict situation. While the ideas are relevant, the abrupt ending prevents a full development of the final request, impacting the overall task achievement. To improve, ensure the letter is completed with a formal or informal closing and maintain a tone that balances the seriousness of the issue with the nature of the relationship.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For example, the transition 'Although I was very disappointed' is a good attempt at a complex sentence structure, but the lack of a concluding paragraph makes the overall flow feel disjointed. The inclusion of the 'history' and 'antique shop' text at the beginning is confusing and appears to be a copy-paste error or a draft note, which disrupts the coherence of the letter significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the message to be understood. You use some specific terms like 'crucial files', 'techsavvy', and 'compensate'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'let you in' (which is vague) and 'deal with my upcoming projects'. The range is sufficient for the task, but there is little evidence of less common or more sophisticated lexical items. Focusing on more natural phrasing and avoiding repetitive structures will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For instance, 'I let you know that I have recently discovered' should be 'I am writing to let you know'. The phrase 'one of your friend who is techsavvy' contains a pluralization error ('friends'). Additionally, the sentence 'I let you in for a few days' is grammatically incomplete in this context. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of verb tenses and plural agreement.

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