Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mittal,

Through this letter, I am telling you that I am very tensed that my lovely speakers are broken due to your mishandling and they are broken with very badly way. Moreover, their body is totally cracked and wires are comes out.

Besides this, it is quite important to me because I usually listen music in morning during my yoga along with this my family members also listen bhajans on it. Moreover, this is gifted by my grandmother who is not alive, on my 10th birthday.

Additionally, I do not have any idea of levying money from you. However, my parents are forcing me to take money from your friend because it is quite important for us. So due to this you have to pay money for your mistake. As soon as possible.

Looking forward to your prompt response!

Navjot Singh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the item, explaining its importance, and stating the desired action. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. The tone is somewhat aggressive and lacks the appropriate social nuance expected in a letter to a friend, which affects the overall communicative quality. To improve, you should expand on the description of the item and soften the language regarding the request for money to better reflect a friendly relationship, even when addressing a serious issue.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on one of the bullet points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Besides this', and 'Additionally' to connect ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure could be improved by using more varied linking phrases to create a smoother progression between sentences. The paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format, which helps the reader follow your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'mishandling', 'valuable', and 'prompt response'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'tensed' (should be 'upset' or 'distressed'), 'broken with very badly way' (should be 'badly damaged'), and 'levying money' (should be 'asking for compensation'). These errors occasionally impede the natural flow of the text. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise adjectives and idiomatic expressions would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The letter contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'wires are comes out' (should be 'wires are coming out') and 'this is gifted by my grandmother' (should be 'this was gifted'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence fragments, such as 'As soon as possible.' at the end of a paragraph. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these errors indicates a need for more careful proofreading and practice with verb tenses and passive voice constructions.

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