Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

DEAR RAHUL,

I HOPE YOU ARE DOING WELL. I AM WRITTING THIS BEACUSE I NOTICED THAT ONE OF MY VALUABLE POSSESSION WAS BROKEN WHEN I WAS AWAY ON MY TRIP.

WHEN I RETUREND HOME YESETRDAY, I FOUND THAT MY TELEVISION WAS BROKEN. I SAW THAT SCREEN HAVE ALOT OF CRACKS AND UNFORTUNATELY, IT IS NOT GETTING TURNED ON. I REMEMBER THAT IT WAS WORKING GOOD BEFORE I WENT ON TRIP AND I AM QUIT SURPRIED TO SEE IT IN THIS CONDITION.

THIS TELEVISION IS VERY IMPROTANT TO ME BECAUSE IT WAS A GIFT FROM MY PARENTS ON MY 18 BIRTHDAY. I HAVE HAD THIS FROM SEVERAL YEARS AND IT WAS WORKING VERY WELL. IT IS SOMETHING WHICH WAS NOT MENT TO BE BROKEN. ALTHOUGH IT MAY BE POSSILBE TO REPLACE IT, I WOULD PREFER TO REPAIR IT IF POSSIBLE.

COULD YOU PLEASE TELL ME WHAT HAPPEND AND PLASE FIND SOMEONE WHO WILL REPAIR IT. IF CAN NOT REPAIRD, I WOULD APPRICIATE IT IF YOU COULD HELP WITH THE COST OF REPLACINF IT.

I LOOK FORWARD TO HEIRING FROM YOU

KIND

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly describe the broken television, explain its sentimental value as an 18th birthday gift, and state what you would like your friend to do regarding repairs or replacement. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, maintaining a balance between being firm about the damage and remaining polite. The ideas are well-developed and the purpose of the letter is clear from the beginning. You have successfully fulfilled all requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task, which helps the reader follow your points easily. You use some cohesive devices like 'although' and 'if possible' to link ideas. However, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure is coherent, making the letter easy to read and understand.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You use a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly, such as 'valuable possession', 'sentimental', and 'appreciate'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'WRITTING', 'BEACUSE', 'RETUREND', 'YESETRDAY', 'IMPROTANT', and 'REPLACINF'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall impression. To reach a higher band, you should focus on proofreading your work to ensure accuracy in common vocabulary and improve your spelling consistency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I would appreciate it if you could help with the cost'. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'one of my valuable possession' (should be 'possessions'), 'working good' (should be 'working well'), and 'I have had this from several years' (should be 'for several years'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent. Increasing your control over verb tenses and prepositions will help improve your score.

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