Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mitali,

How are you? i hope you are doing well. Trip was great and enjoyable both of us went on lots of places to visit.

Happiness was on my face until i came home than i saw my broken Macbook on the table. Aggression was on my face with lots of questions in my mind that how it happened? Than i saw security cameras in which i can clearly saw that its broken by you accidentally.

Having sentimental value in my heart for that as you know it was gifted by my grandmother on my last birthday and she is no more in this world this is last gift i ever received by her.

Next i am expecting you to do its repair properly from Apple store. i will really appreciate that just tell me cost if it will be too much i am ready to contribute as i know you didn't do it intentionally.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Warm Regards,

Sukhan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: describing the broken Macbook, explaining its sentimental value, and requesting a repair. However, the tone is inconsistent. While the task asks for a letter to a friend, the language used—such as 'Aggression was on my face' and 'I am expecting you to do its repair'—is overly formal, aggressive, and unnatural for a friendly correspondence. The task is addressed, but the development of ideas lacks the appropriate register for the requested relationship, which limits the effectiveness of the communication.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, each addressing a specific requirement of the prompt. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Next i am expecting' is abrupt, and the use of 'than' instead of 'then' in 'than i saw' disrupts the flow. While the overall progression of ideas is clear, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structures make the cohesion feel somewhat basic.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the nuance required for a higher band. Phrases like 'Aggression was on my face' are unnatural collocations. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'went on lots of places' instead of 'visited many places'. While the meaning is clear, the range is limited, and the student relies on simple, sometimes inaccurate, phrasing rather than more precise or idiomatic language suitable for a letter to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writing contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Common issues include missing articles ('on table'), incorrect verb tenses ('its broken by you'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('she is no more in this world this is last gift'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters for 'i'. These errors are frequent, though they do not completely impede the reader's understanding of the message.

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