Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Friend,

I am writing this letter to discuss a very crucial thing that is my valuable possession which I found was broken. You remember that last week I went on an office trip with my boss and I let you to stay in my room because you had a project in my area. When I was cleaning my apartment, I found my extremely precious possession was broken.

You do not know but it is very crucial for me as it was a gift from my parents. My parents gave me this on my 18th birthday, and when I saw it broken , I was disappointed as I came to it was you who broke this as no one came to my apartment after you. My heart goes heavy.

I am feeling extremely sad as you didn't even tell me about this infact you hide this from me. I would really appreciate even if you even apologize your mistake instead of hiding.

Your friend.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points: describing the item, explaining its importance, and stating what you want the friend to do. However, the description of the item is vague; you mention it is a 'valuable possession' and a 'gift from my parents' but fail to specify what the object actually is (e.g., a camera, a vase, or a watch). This lack of detail makes the letter feel incomplete. To improve, ensure you provide concrete details to fully develop your ideas as required by the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the narrative. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition 'You do not know but it is very crucial' is slightly unnatural. While you use some cohesive devices, the logical progression is occasionally hindered by repetitive phrasing, such as the repeated use of 'crucial' and 'possession'. Using a wider variety of linking words and pronouns would help improve the overall flow and make the connections between your ideas more explicit.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks precision. You rely heavily on basic descriptors like 'valuable' and 'crucial'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'my heart goes heavy' (which should be 'my heart grew heavy') and 'infact you hide this' (which should be 'in fact, you hid this'). To reach a higher band, try to use more specific vocabulary related to the situation, such as 'sentimental value' or 'negligence', and ensure your word choices are grammatically appropriate for the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors that occasionally impede the reader. For example, 'I let you to stay' is incorrect (should be 'I let you stay'), and 'I came to it was you' is grammatically unclear. There are also punctuation issues, such as the space before the comma in 'broken ,'. While your meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in verb tense and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher level of accuracy.

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