Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear friend

I am writing this letter to letting you know about the condition of my beautiful apartment that was absolutely got damaged as I came back from trip . As i given you responsibility of everything in my apartment, now I want to express my resentment about what you did in my apartment. I am not happy with the decision about the responsibility given to you . When I inspect all the things in my rooms , that was broken down . All my valuables were in bad condition, bedsheet was too dirty . In showcases all the hand made vases were broken completely.Since examine the all , there was no other way to be disappointment.My heart was ached . Whatever valuable kept in my apartment that was specifically made on order .Right now , I want to say that our friendship is not good as much before and also want to know that was the cause of so much destruction in my apartment.If t

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses the prompt requirements by describing the damage and explaining the importance of the items. However, the tone is overly aggressive and accusatory, which is inappropriate for a letter to a friend, even one who has caused damage. The response ends abruptly mid-sentence ('If t'), which means the final bullet point regarding what the friend should do is not fully addressed. While the initial points are covered, the lack of a clear resolution or request for action, combined with the incomplete ending, limits the task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. While there is a basic attempt to sequence ideas, the flow is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes incorrect way, such as 'Since examine the all'. The lack of a proper closing and the abrupt ending significantly disrupt the coherence of the letter, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended progression of the message.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often misused. Phrases like 'absolutely got damaged' and 'my heart was ached' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over collocations. The student relies on basic, repetitive words such as 'apartment', 'broken', and 'valuable'. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated or precise language to describe the situation. The errors in word choice occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the specific nature of the damage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are significant issues with verb tenses ('As i given you', 'Whatever valuable kept'), sentence construction ('I am writing this letter to letting you know'), and article usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces placed incorrectly before commas. These frequent errors, combined with the incomplete final sentence, indicate a limited control over grammatical structures.

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