Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Poojan,

I hope you doing well. I am writing this letter to you to inform you about while i was not in town and was on a trip, I let you to stay in my apartment around seven days. once I came back from my vacation, I have noticed that a valuable possession of mine was broken.

It was a flower pot, which has such a unique design. it was made in Japan and was imported by my grand parents during that time. It is not such an expensive piece of item. However, it is my grandparents memory which stayed in my heart as of their presence with me. It keeps me to stay connected with my grand elders. This is the most valuable reason why I love that flower vast.

I need your favour on this, because of this I am not able to tell truth to my parents. I am sure that my parents have faith onto you. Although you accidentally broke that vast, they will trust you more than me.

Looking forward to hearing from you my friend.

Yours best friend,

aarsh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the item, explaining its importance, and requesting action. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the request for your friend to tell your parents is a bit confusing and lacks clarity regarding what exactly you want them to do (e.g., apologize, pay for it, or simply explain the accident). To reach a higher band, ensure that your requests are specific and that the narrative flow between the accident and your proposed solution is more logically connected.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use basic cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Although' to link ideas. However, there are some issues with referencing and flow. For instance, the transition in the first paragraph is slightly clunky ('I am writing this letter to you to inform you about while i was not in town'). Additionally, the connection between the broken item and the request to your friend feels abrupt. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would improve the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message, such as 'valuable possession', 'unique design', and 'accidentally'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations. For example, you use 'grand elders' instead of 'grandparents' or 'elders', and 'flower vast' instead of 'flower vase'. There is also a misuse of 'favour' in the context of asking someone to take responsibility. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary and better attention to common collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('I hope you doing well' should be 'I hope you are doing well'), tense inconsistencies ('I have noticed' should be 'I noticed'), and article usage ('the truth' instead of 'tell truth'). Additionally, there are punctuation and capitalization errors, such as 'i' instead of 'I' and 'grand parents' as two words. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit your score in this criterion.

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