Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Azhar,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing because I have noticed that my laptop screen was broken which very much important for me while your were staying in my apartment.

The laptop is much important as it is the official one provided by the company. it holds much important data both my personal and work data, and you how much crucial is that data for me if I lost this data I may lost my job, I hope you understand the situation.

Now I request you to please find any solution for this and repair this for me as I need it urgently and I don't have much expenses as I just came back from a trip and spend a lot of money there.

if you could just make it repair at your earliest I will be very much thank full to you as it could save my job.

looking forward to a positive response from your side.

Regards:

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: describing the broken laptop, explaining its importance, and requesting a solution. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The description of the damage is brief, and the explanation of the laptop's importance is repetitive, relying heavily on the phrase 'much important'. While the tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, the ideas could be expanded with more specific details to fully satisfy the requirements of a higher band. The purpose of the letter is clear throughout, and the reader understands the situation and the requested action.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the narrative. There is a clear progression from the initial greeting to the problem description, the explanation of importance, and finally the request for a solution. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions between sentences are occasionally abrupt, and the letter relies on simple conjunctions. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the lack of a wider variety of linking words and more sophisticated referencing prevents it from reaching a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. There is significant repetition of basic words, such as 'important' and 'data'. Phrases like 'much important' are grammatically incorrect and indicate a limited grasp of collocation. While the student manages to convey the message clearly, there is little attempt to use less common or more sophisticated vocabulary. To improve, the student should focus on using a wider variety of adjectives and adverbs to describe the situation and avoid repeating the same basic descriptors throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'my laptop screen was broken which very much important' (missing verb/awkward structure), 'while your were staying' (incorrect pronoun), and 'I will be very much thank full' (spelling/word formation). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with run-on sentences in the second paragraph. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading and a better understanding of basic sentence construction.

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