Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Abhi,

Hope you are doing great.Iam writing this letter to inform you about the broken Trophy that I found the living room.

I was back today in the evening from trip and i found the trophy is lying on the floor when I opened the door and trying to get into the apartment.That trophy was so special and important to me as you know that was my first ever achivement in my cricket career.

It was so special and important to me because that was the first and last time that my mother could make her physical appearence to the cricket stadium as she is being diagnoised from Cyatica. It is very emotional moment for me becuase she was able to watch me from the stadium and winning of first ever cricket cup. I feel that i have my memories of my walking for the last time in that trophy which I found broken.

Can you please explain how and why did it happen. Just to let you know that Iam not mad at you but I feel my emotions are broken. Here is what I wanted you to do. If you feel sorry for what ever happened, can you please write an apology letter to my Mother explaining . how and what circumstances it happend.

Thank you,

Your's lovingly,

Harish Medepudi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The student covers all bullet points of the prompt well. You described the broken possession as a cricket trophy, explained its importance by noting it was your first achievement and that your mother watched you win it despite her sciatica, and explained what you would like your friend to do by asking them to write an apology letter to your mother. The tone is appropriate for a friendly letter. The ideas are extended and supported effectively, particularly regarding the emotional significance of the object. This aligns well with the requirements for a Band 7 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from a greeting and the discovery of the broken item, to its background importance, and finally to the request for an apology. Paragraphing is used, though paragraph breaks are somewhat erratic (e.g., separating the explanation of importance into two short blocks that could be better unified). Cohesive devices like 'That trophy was so special' and 'Here is what I wanted you to do' are used, but referencing and linking can feel slightly mechanical or abrupt. Overall, the organization is clear enough to secure a Band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'achievement', 'diagnoised' (misspelled), and 'circumstances'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'achivement', 'Cyatica' (sciatica), and 'appearence' (appearance). While communication is not impeded and the tone is conversational yet sincere, these persistent spelling inaccuracies cap the score at Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I was back today in the evening from trip and i found the trophy is lying on the floor'. Grammatical errors occur throughout the response, including spacing issues ('Iam', 'i found'), tense inconsistencies ('trying to get' instead of 'tried to get'), and awkward phrasing like 'she is being diagnoised from Cyatica'. Punctuation errors are also present (missing commas, improper capitalization of 'Iam'). These frequent errors mean the response sits firmly within the Band 5 descriptor.

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