Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear friend,

i am writing this letter reagarding the goods which damaged when you lived in my suit,When i went for my trip i gave you few responisbilites to take care of my condo but when i returend form my vacation and enterd in my building i was feel horrible and shocked to see all the things, i saw my flower port brocked in peicies and i feel sad.

this flower port is very valuable aaset for me because my graany gave me this pots when i was 18 years old, My grandmom know i am very senisitive with nature moreover i always planted a tree in my house which give me inner peace as well as keep the inside atmosphere clean and provide me a good air foe inhale.My onlu intesion to writing this letter to please repair my flowerport at any condition,Either you reoair from my market or your self, because i am emotionaaly attached with that things and also want to tell you in future if you live in somebody else apartment make sure all the asset leave as it is,

your Dear friend,

xyz

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: the student describes the broken possession as a 'flower port' (pot), explains its importance due to its sentimental value from their grandmother, and specifies what they want the friend to do by asking them to repair it. However, the development of ideas is limited, and the tone fluctuates slightly. The response addresses all parts of the task sufficiently to satisfy the requirements for Band 6.0, as the relevant ideas are present, though they are somewhat under-developed and lack the extension expected at higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

Coherence and cohesion are noticeably weak in this response. The letter suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, as nearly the entire text is written as a single dense block with run-on sentences, such as 'When i went for my trip i gave you few responisbilites to take care of my condo but when i returend form my vacation and enterd in my building i was feel horrible...'. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and punctuation is largely absent or misused, leading to a breakdown in logical progression. This corresponds to the Band 5.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors that reflect a limited control of word forms, such as 'reagarding' (regarding), 'suit' (suite/apartment), 'responisbilites' (responsibilities), 'port' (pot), 'brocked' (broken), 'graany' (granny), and 'intesion' (intention). While the student attempts some less common phrasing like 'emotionally attached', the high frequency of spelling and word-choice errors places this response firmly at Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is restricted primarily to simple and over-extended compound sentences linked incorrectly with commas, creating run-on structures. There is a persistent lack of capitalization for the pronoun 'i', and numerous tense and agreement errors, such as 'goods which damaged', 'was feel horrible', and 'all the asset leave as it is'. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and align with Band 5.0.

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