Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Harry,

I hope this letter finds you and your family well.

I just came back today morning from my trip and to my surprise I discovered that the TV remote control is not working anymore, there's a significant crack on the bottom left corner which was not there before.

The remote is very important as I cannot on the TV without it and change the channels

To be honest I was expecting you to inform me beforehand about the broken remote as I gave you my House to stay in and take care of it in my absence, it's not something you can hide from me indefenitely now since the remote is broken I'm requesting you to replace it as soon as possible and give me a clear explanation on how this accident happend.

I'expecting a call or at least an message from you no later that tonight.

Regards,

Kamel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points: you identify the damaged TV remote, explain that you need it to operate the television, and ask Harry to replace it and explain what happened. The request is clear, and the letter maintains a relevant, direct purpose. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others. The remote’s personal importance is explained only in practical terms, and the expectation that Harry should have told you earlier is expressed strongly without much context. A brief explanation of why the remote is valuable to you, or a more considerate way to frame the request, would make the message more complete and appropriately balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally understandable sequence: greeting, news of your return, description of the damage, explanation of its importance, and a request. The reader can follow your main message, and the opening and closing are appropriate. However, most of the central information is packed into one long paragraph, so the description, your reaction, and the requested actions are not clearly separated. The transition from the remote’s practical importance to your criticism of Harry is also abrupt. Use two or three short paragraphs and clearer links between the damage, its significance, and your request. This would improve progression and make the letter easier to read without changing its direct tone.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the situation, including “significant crack,” “in my absence,” and “replace it.” These choices make the problem and your request clear. However, some word choices and spelling errors reduce accuracy and naturalness: “indefenitely” and “happend” are misspelled, while “clear explanation on how this accident happened” is less natural than a more concise collocation. “I gave you my House” also uses an unnecessarily formal capitalisation and does not express the arrangement naturally. Aim for accurate spelling and more idiomatic phrases, especially when describing the damage and asking your friend to take responsibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the meaning is generally understandable. For example, you connect the damage to your request in a longer sentence, and the letter includes a clear explanation of why the remote is useful. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence boundaries and verb patterns. “I cannot on the TV” is missing the verb “turn,” and “I'expecting” needs a finite verb form. The long sentence beginning “To be honest” also needs clearer punctuation or division into shorter sentences. Check articles and sentence punctuation as well; these issues do not prevent understanding, but they make the writing less controlled.

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