Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Anna

My name is Booke. I am writing this letter to you not only send greeting to you but also let you know about a proplem in the time you were stay in my house

while I was on the way coming back.

you know when I arrived home I had seen my laptop was broken. The Laptop could not charge and died. that is also given by my father, its a memorable for me to enter University. you are the only one that I allow to touch the device. because I believe you. how ever I did not belive that the laptop was given by my father did not work because of you. I brought it to the PC shop and they told me the buy another one and I rejected. but I think its the only one treasure that I have

so now you did it wrong I hope I could recieve an apolozire or another laptop from you

best wishes

Booke

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover the main situation and include all three requested points: the laptop is broken and will not charge, it was a gift from your father connected with entering university, and you ask Anna for an apology or a replacement. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a sense of your disappointment. However, the explanation of what happened is unclear, and the request is not expressed with a consistently clear or appropriate position: “I hope I could receive an apology or another laptop” leaves the desired action uncertain. The importance of the laptop is mentioned but could be developed more specifically. Explain its personal significance and state calmly whether you want your friend to pay for repairs, replace it, or discuss what happened.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter follows a broadly understandable order: you introduce the problem, describe the laptop, explain its importance, and make a request. Some linking words, such as “because” and “so,” help connect ideas. However, the response is presented largely as one continuous block, and the progression is weakened by abrupt or unclear transitions, including “while I was on the way coming back” and “how ever I did not believe.” References such as “that” and “it” are not always easy to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the problem, its significance, and your request, and connect each point with clear, accurate transitions. A conventional closing and clearer punctuation would also make the letter easier to navigate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the central issue, including “laptop,” “charge,” “father,” “University,” and “PC shop.” Words such as “memorable” and “treasure” also show an attempt to express the laptop’s emotional value. However, the range is limited, and noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the message harder to understand, for example “proplem,” “recieve,” and “apolozire.” Some phrases are not natural in this context, such as “the only one treasure” and “I allow to touch the device.” Choose more precise expressions and check spelling carefully. For instance, “a treasured possession” and “I trusted you to use it” would communicate your meaning more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and connectors, as in “because I believe you” and “when I arrived home,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts at longer structures are often faulty. Errors in tense, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently: “when I arrived home I had seen my laptop was broken” and “its a memorable for me to enter University” are difficult to process. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several sentences running together or beginning with lowercase letters. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences, such as “When I got home, I found that my laptop was broken,” and check each sentence for a subject, verb, and complete structure before moving on.

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