Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Hi John,

I hope you are doing well. I returned home back from the holiday and found the broken LCD in my living room. As you were living here while I was away, I thought I should reach out to you to get an idea kf what has happened.

It was a latest model Samsung 96 inch LCD with built-in speakers installed in it. I can see a crack in the middle of glass of the screen and scrathes on the border.

As you are aware that this LCD was gifted by my father, it holds a high emotional value for me. This purchase from him always reminds me of they day we spent togather while selecting this model.

I would like to clear my doubt about who broke it. If it was you, I would like you to cover the expense on its repair. If the damage is beyond repair, I would appreciate if you could buy me the LCD of same size and model for my living room.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best Regards,

Fazal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the damaged LCD, explain its sentimental importance because it was a gift from your father, and ask John to pay for repairs or replace it if necessary. The personal memory of choosing it together adds relevant detail. Your request is clear, but the letter could handle the uncertainty more tactfully and develop the practical next step—for example, ask John what happened before setting out what you expect if he caused the damage. The description is specific, though the exact size and model matter less than clarifying the extent of the damage. Overall, the task is covered well, with some parts more fully developed than others; a more balanced explanation and a more considerate request would strengthen it further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear progression: you open by explaining why you are writing, describe the damage, explain the television’s emotional significance, and then state your request. Separate paragraphs make these stages easy to follow, and phrases such as “As you are aware” help connect the explanation to your friend. The closing is also appropriate. Some links are slightly mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “I would like,” and “I thought I should reach out to you to get an idea” is wordy before the main question is stated. A more direct transition from the damage to asking what happened would make the progression smoother and the cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the situation, including “built-in speakers,” “crack,” “emotional value,” and “beyond repair.” These choices communicate the problem and its personal significance clearly. There are, however, several spelling errors, including “scrathes,” “togather,” and “kf,” as well as some unnatural or imprecise phrasing: “LCD” is repeated where “television” or “screen” could vary the wording, and “cover the expense on its repair” is not a natural collocation. “A latest model” is also an awkward expression. More accurate spelling, natural collocations, and a little more variation in referring to the item would improve precision and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the conditional “If it was you” and the sentence explaining that the television reminds you of a shared memory. The message remains understandable throughout. Some grammatical errors are present, however: “I returned home back from the holiday” uses an unnecessary “back,” “As you are aware that” has an incorrect clause structure, and “I would appreciate if” needs “it” after “appreciate.” There are also article and preposition issues in “in the middle of glass of the screen” and “of same size and model.” Review clause patterns and article use, and aim for more consistently accurate complex sentences while retaining the range you already attempt.

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